The Destroyer

[Solace]

I hope you realize that I can stomp or rip on you all like flies,
and any little diss or joke will all be lies,
all be shit in my eyes, all be shit that dies,
don't defy the great even if hes an asshole,
'cause we all have the same objective, all the same goals,
to get laid everyday and have a contract for all your flows,
so don't get weak, tired and start to doze, cause
this stuff will wake you up in the morning just like a cup of joe,
blow up in your face and have an impact on all of those,
who chose to hear me out for once, just this once,
but to be truthful I ain't here to impress all you cunts,
I don't even wanna hear your voice for 12 months,
I just wanna know how bad I've messed you up;
ripped you up from the inside just like Sub-Zero,
spine out, blood gashing, people screaming all on the floor,
you better call up your best lawyer,
'cause uh, we all know I am The Destroyer.




Please tell me any lines your liked, or lines that you have a suggestion on how I could work on it. Its been a while since I did anything, summer is taking up my time. Im really trying to improve, but nothing really has happened

EDIT: Tried to fix it up a bit.
EDIT: Kinda lead it in a different direction =/

[Emadyville]

Rhymes were too simple, the flow wasn't there, and the content was not too interesting.

[Solace]

Rhymes were too simple, the flow wasn't there, and the content was not too interesting.

Thanks, im really trying to get better but its just not happening

[Solace]

Come on, not even one more person wants to read it? Its just 1 minute taken from your life...


I even edited it a lot, hopefully its better but Im not sure.

[Arabian Shady]

hmm i thought it flowed pretty well, but there was NO concept, or atleast a strong concept , get what i mean??..i still feel that you could easily blow every 1 wid a funny drop cause i still feel that comedy is your element,
but i gues thats how I feel,but i guess your improving, keep tryin man,
peace

[Solace]

hmm i thought it flowed pretty well, but there was NO concept, or atleast a strong concept , get what i mean??..i still feel that you could easily blow every 1 wid a funny drop cause i still feel that comedy is your element,
but i gues thats how I feel,but i guess your improving, keep tryin man,
peace

Thanks a lot, i appreciate it Next time i do something, ill try to add some funny lines and stuff. And try to actually have a concept :P

[enjinn]

i feel it was a good verse...just work on your rhymes...those are most improtant...it gives everything a better flow...listen to people who use a lot of multies and learn from them