Suicidal

[whitetrashrap]

its the same old shit, i cant joke or play without sumone goin to flip
without the clips hittin some bitch
im NOT changing, i am who i am
i joke i fuck around i screw up
its nature, its human, i wont change for any one of you
not for the crew, not for my fam, not for a single goddamn soul
all the bullshit i get of how im fuckin unfit
how i always get hit, how i joke but leave one measly bruise
now its my body you want to misuse, i hate when shit happens un-intentionally
how we have a good time then its time for my friends to commit a crime
i just want to go back in time tell certain people not to lie
tell myself not to cry tell others i ill change and be ready for the monster i became
but to sum ill stay true, to sum like my crew
yet were tearing apart, were breaking
and to me this is just painstaking
i cant stand it, i dont want to take it anymore
ive had no true family complete with a dad
to me my father was just a fag layd down done drugs
now my friends the only thing that i love
but they splittin from me, the crew is goin to shit
everyday i feel as if someones gonna jump outta shadows and give me a hit
cut off my lip making sure i bleed out till my body quit
im getting paranoid ill admit it, no ones here to help they all went to hell
so ima fall without anyone to help me get up
i claim to be strong but deep inside im weak
ima mental fucked up lil freak
under this skin ima fuckin sheep
feeling suicidal tellin myself "if i die itll all be behind ya"
yet i dont believe the words i say
in my heart ive lost the love, ive lost the ambition
in my eyes all youll see is emptyness, filled to the brim, with complete darkness
ive gone insane from the loss of being humane
i once came around, but once again, ive lost it all
alone ill fall, and today, im feelin suicidal.

[Arabian Shady]

1st things 1st

You need to have flow...that has no flow

exactly , plus your lines HAVE TO RHYME,i just read 6 lines off that and ecided to post man..if that was a poem that its kool , but if that was what WE thought it was, then it was a reali bad attempt
take heed on the advice,criticism helps
peace

[Jay-19]

I agree with the previous posts.