Rise Of The Rivalry

[Xray]

My latest verse just wrote this, and i think its sick and filled the fuck out with multis. a very rhyming verse with awesome flow, so check it and leave feed thanks. oh btw i named it "rise of the rivalry" cause it ends with that and it sorta reflects that you got competition.


Yo its the stand-able rapper, your just a capital blabber//
Im like a gap away from ya, you need to switch that shit Abba//
your idols lame MC Hammer, mines a knife and a dagger//
a fucking sword and a shanker, you ain't seen nuttin lacker//
this hoe ain't shit but a slapper, she soon be turned into splatter//
Im a blood slitting addict, and yes Im straight from down under//
soon be blowing heroically, Im devoted yeah probably//
from the nature of poetry, wicked minded that's devilry//
other rappers are mad at me, corny bitches there warning me//
bring it on, single handedly, I wipe you outta this galaxy//
my mind neglects the brutality, and goes straight to fatality//
quite yep but Im rapidly, growing quick so I quietly//
shove a dick in this dynasty, deep throat you before you hire me//
fuck you labels you randomly, choose a gimmick and set em free//
hell naa you repeatedly, grow a dick deep inside of he//
but guess what motherfuckers? its the rise of the rivalry//

lacker as in some one who lacks. shanker as in a knife just another street word.
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[Speech]

holy shit your a evil motherfucker
nice one
*releases song with similar lyrics*

[Xray]

:o I give you so much praise I much sound like a groupie, but

that was dope man

Im a blood slitting addict, and yes Im straight from down under//

That line is sick, *writes a book about sajjad and makes this the title*

haha thanks man, you my number one supporter and i want to read that book

holy shit your a evil motherfucker
nice one
*releases song with similar lyrics*

yeaaahhhh thanks homie, and yeah looking forward to that track

[Epidemik]

nice dude! alot of good multies in that verse!
flow was sick!! sounds like a quick flow.?
anyway would like to here that shit recorded!

[Xray]

nice dude! alot of good multies in that verse!
flow was sick!! sounds like a quick flow.?
anyway would like to here that shit recorded!

dayem! glad you enjoyed it bro and yep its a quick flow glad you noticed

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

its a good verse by you

filled the fuck out with multis. a very rhyming verse with awesome flow,

blowing your own trumpet eh lol


i KNOW itll have a great flow its text and hard to judge but i know how you do your rapping youll flow it perfect witch is nice, i wouldnt say is filled out with multi's, there one or 2 nice ones though,

Yo its the stand-able rapper, your just a capital blabber

good multi and also assonence (sp?) rhyming witch is good to see

the rest is solid rhyming, not necceserarly multi's though

other rappers are mad at me, corny bitches there warning me//
bring it on, single handedly, I wipe you outta this galaxy//

what you bolded here aint multi's.

this hoe ain't shit but a slapper, she soon be turned into splatter//

if your tryna work on multis you missed out some chances to add in more rhymes, that line could be.

this hoe ain't shit but a slapper, she soon be hit to a splatter

its simple but gets a a multi in there.



solid structure for most of it though and itll sound great with your delivery and flow

[Xray]

its a good verse by you

filled the fuck out with multis. a very rhyming verse with awesome flow,

blowing your own trumpet eh lol


i KNOW itll have a great flow its text and hard to judge but i know how you do your rapping youll flow it perfect witch is nice, i wouldnt say is filled out with multi's, there one or 2 nice ones though,

Yo its the stand-able rapper, your just a capital blabber

good multi and also assonence (sp?) rhyming witch is good to see

the rest is solid rhyming, not necceserarly multi's though

other rappers are mad at me, corny bitches there warning me//
bring it on, single handedly, I wipe you outta this galaxy//

what you bolded here aint multi's.

this hoe ain't shit but a slapper, she soon be turned into splatter//

if your tryna work on multis you missed out some chances to add in more rhymes, that line could be.

this hoe ain't shit but a slapper, she soon be hit to a splatter

its simple but gets a a multi in there.



solid structure for most of it though and itll sound great with your delivery and flow

damn, props for the breakdown, and yeah i see what you mean, might of over reacted with the multi thing. but thanks for your honesty bro, appreciate it

[Arabian Shady]

sick flow bro, liked that shit
the begining reminded me of an eminem flow, cant remember which tho
all in all a solid peice
Peace

[Urban Punk]

Nice! I like how after two or three line’s your vocab got better and the content got sicker keep it up bro

[Xray]

^^thanks to both of you, glad ya'll liked it

[Ka0t1c]

i see a lot of potential for a great piece, most of it i didnt like but this is my favorite out of this verse:

heroically, Im devoted yeah probably//
from the nature of poetry, wicked minded that's devilry//
other rappers are mad at me, corny bitches there warning me//
bring it on, single handedly

u got some good skill and i know this can be far better than what u posted...

overall tho, it was worth posting and reading

keep it up

for this piece, my rating is 72/100

[Xray]

i see a lot of potential for a great piece, most of it i didnt like but this is my favorite out of this verse:

heroically, Im devoted yeah probably//
from the nature of poetry, wicked minded that's devilry//
other rappers are mad at me, corny bitches there warning me//
bring it on, single handedly

u got some good skill and i know this can be far better than what u posted...

overall tho, it was worth posting and reading

keep it up

for this piece, my rating is 72/100

damn, thats a hell of feed. making me want to edit a few lines bro, so thanks alot

[Tash8]

u didn't really have that much multi's and i'd be disappointed for you to join the syllables club, i've liked your style a lot more when it's not complex rhymes but rather graphic imagery.. i think you should stick with that...

[Xray]

u didn't really have that much multi's and i'd be disappointed for you to join the syllables club, i've liked your style a lot more when it's not complex rhymes but rather graphic imagery.. i think you should stick with that...

i was trying a new flow/style. i will always be what i am, just cause one verse is different style/flow doesn't mean i've changed.

[tjb]

My latest verse just wrote this, and i think its sick and filled the fuck out with multis. a very rhyming verse with awesome flow, so check it and leave feed thanks. oh btw i named it "rise of the rivalry" cause it ends with that and it sorta reflects that you got competition.


Yo its the stand-able rapper, your just a capital blabber//
Im like a gap away from ya, you need to switch that shit Abba//
your idols lame MC Hammer, mines a knife and a dagger//
a fucking sword and a shanker, you ain't seen nuttin lacker//
this hoe ain't shit but a slapper, she soon be turned into splatter//
Im a blood slitting addict, and yes Im straight from down under//
soon be blowing heroically, Im devoted yeah probably//
from the nature of poetry, wicked minded that's devilry//
other rappers are mad at me, corny bitches there warning me//
bring it on, single handedly, I wipe you outta this galaxy//
my mind neglects the brutality, and goes straight to fatality//
quite yep but Im rapidly, growing quick so I quietly//
shove a dick in this dynasty, deep throat you before you hire me//
fuck you labels you randomly, choose a gimmick and set em free//
hell naa you repeatedly, grow a dick deep inside of he//
but guess what motherfuckers? its the rise of the rivalry//

lacker as in some one who lacks. shanker as in a knife just another street word.
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tht was tite ray