NEW STEVE SPAG - Who's That Kid

[Steve Spag]

I wrote this peice not too long ago, and actually got it recorded. For now I'm just gonna post the lyrics up because there's still some quality issues. It's got a different flow for it, so hopefully you get it. Anyways, let me know what ya' think. All feedback is appreciated as always.

i keep traveling this road, i know i'm growin' old//
and i ain't ever trippin' until the story's told//
yeah, it's a life overdose//
and it once was bright, now the light is closed//
so i might overdose//
because my life's been shit as of lately, despite all of my foes//
you know this is a writer that's a pro//
so don't you get in my way, or step on my toes//
i ain't fightin'no more, although i'm likin' this whore//
she's got a tight little bra, she'll put you in the physce ward//
ain't no point of the games of dyke wars//
they lame, it's strike four, they're fake, like light swords//
i move this shit from my brain to mic. cords//
the rain is on course, today it might pour//
matter fact today it might storm, you might just get away//
just pick the right door//

Copywright: Steven Spagnuolo 2008

Leave Feedback Please

[Solace]

you kinda lost me at this line:

i ain't fightin'no more, although i'm likin' this whore//
she's got a tight little bra, she'll put you in the physce ward//

but

i move this shit from my brain to mic. cords//

brought me back into it.

It was nice, i wonder how you flow to it. Is it like your piece "519"'s flow?

There werent any lines that i really liked, but it was overall good

[Steve Spag]

you kinda lost me at this line:

i ain't fightin'no more, although i'm likin' this whore//
she's got a tight little bra, she'll put you in the physce ward//

Actually that's a good point, lol. Doesn't really fit in on topic eh? lol...hmmm, lol.

But thanks for the feed

[Urban Punk]

It’s not bad, though personally think you can do better. Do you draft your work?

[SajN]

Not your best this time, but good

And yeah, the lines that were pointed out on the first post didn't really fit in..

And also, the rhyme suddenly changed, which made me fell off or something lol ..

But overall it was good

[Arabian Shady]

this aint exactly at par with the level your previous drops have set,lol..the were a couple glitches here and their allready mentioned.
with all you've proven this seems a bit below Spag standards,lol but its kool wid this
Peace

i move this shit from my brain to mic. cords//
the rain is on course, today it might pour//

wiked

[Ka0t1c]

it's pretty good but needs adjusting to make it stick perfectly so its more creative than what it is right now