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Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Solace » Sep 20th, '08, 22:49

Track gonna be on my first mixtape (The Epiphany Tape)

It was recorded (check Audio Stage) but its gotten reallyyyy bad reviews so me and Ice are redoing it, new beat, better delivery, and slightly different lyrics.

[Chorus : Epiphany]
Verbally punish you, I'll burn you down,
Your not a rapper or a gangster, your a clown,
You can't rhyme, and I know that you're a biter,
Time to burn you down like a fag and a lighter.

[Verse 1 : Epiphany]
Say your sick, listen to a couple of your tracks,
if you havent noticed, most of them are wack,
Me and Ice Killa, rip your shit through hardcore flows,
we bully you with our style, no need for sticks and stones,
cause all of your bones, are probably made of dough,
and even on the mic, you rap like an 8 year old,
and most of your shit makes people start to doze,
my shit wakes people like a couple cups of joe,
but I don't try to act cocky, it came to me from birth,
same reason why your wack, it's almost like a curse,
im your only enemy, you're everyones bitch,
cause i dont take shit from you, that's your only wish,
to get respected by me, and it aint gunna happen,
so some how you just had to start rappin',
telling me that your gunna start the capping,
(Haha) man, I gotta stop the laughing,
you try to diss me hard, but i only take it lightly,
cause both me and Ice know you cant outwrite me.

[Chorus x2]

[Verse 2 : Ice Killa]
You gettin' rocked by these beats,
and stomped by these cleats,
but you don't have the guts to walk on these streets,
you nuthin' but fresh meat,
you can't take the heat,
so step away from me,
you don't know the meaning of a real G,
and i don't mean a gangster,
you ain't nothin but a wanksta,
like an everlasting gobstopper,
I don't ever lose my flavor,
and sure I may be hated,
but I'm the G, and the G stands for Greatest.
that means u the weakest link in this chain we call the rap game,
i don't care about club banging, i'll leave u hangin' like saddam hussein,
but my aim is to maintain a flame, no matter how much fame i attain,
i'll always remain the same, good god i'm insane,
words racing in my brain, i'm experiencing pain,
my parachute won't open, i'm falling like rain.....
[Chorus]
Last edited by Solace on Oct 6th, '08, 02:06, edited 16 times in total.
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Re: Burn You Down

Postby Requiem » Sep 20th, '08, 22:59

like it so far, sounds like a fight song/diss track. look forward to more :8)
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Re: Burn You Down

Postby Steve Spag » Sep 20th, '08, 23:04

Would like to see a final product, but it's lookin' good. Can't really tell how it would flow without the beat, but it looks cool.

Keep it up man.
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Re: Burn You Down

Postby Emadyville » Sep 20th, '08, 23:06

too simple, not feeling it. make it longer
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Re: Burn You Down

Postby Solace » Sep 20th, '08, 23:07

Thanks Ice Killa+Steve, really appreciate it.

Yeah, it's a diss track, like Cat & Mouse will be.

And Emadyville, thanks for checking it out but if you have noticed, im still writing it.
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Re: Burn You Down

Postby Kez » Sep 21st, '08, 00:08

Reading it i can see there could be a really sick flow behind this, so i hope to hear it :y:
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Re: Burn You Down

Postby Solace » Sep 21st, '08, 00:13

Kez wrote:Reading it i can see there could be a really sick flow behind this, so i hope to hear it :y:


Thanks! Hopefully i can make it sound good when recording. But yeah, i appreciate it a lot :y:
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Re: Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Requiem » Sep 21st, '08, 00:42

it's going to be a sweet track :8) i think we're the biggest presence on the creative writing section right now. besides steve spag. :y:
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Re: Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Solace » Sep 21st, '08, 00:46

IceKilla wrote:it's going to be a sweet track :8) i think we're the biggest presence on the creative writing section right now. besides steve spag. :y:


Haha yeah man :smoking:
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Re: Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Steve Spag » Sep 21st, '08, 01:07

Both of your verses are sick, but this line by Ice Killa just blew me away:

and i don't mean a gangster,
you ain't nothin but a wanksta,
like an everlasting gobstopper,
i don't ever lose my flavor,


Reallly wittty shit there.
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Re: Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Solace » Sep 21st, '08, 01:13

Steve Spag wrote:Both of your verses are sick, but this line by Ice Killa just blew me away:

and i don't mean a gangster,
you ain't nothin but a wanksta,
like an everlasting gobstopper,
i don't ever lose my flavor,


Reallly wittty shit there.


Haha thanks for rechecking it. Yeah i liked
like an everlasting gobstopper,
i don't ever lose my flavor,
mostly of his verse

This better be an ill production :P
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Re: Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Requiem » Sep 21st, '08, 01:26

Steve Spag wrote:Both of your verses are sick, but this line by Ice Killa just blew me away:

and i don't mean a gangster,
you ain't nothin but a wanksta,
like an everlasting gobstopper,
i don't ever lose my flavor,


Reallly wittty shit there.


thx man :8) i freestyled that verse. and i was just trying to rhyme with gangster, and i was like, flavor, gobstopper, here we go.....
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Re: Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Arabian Shady » Sep 21st, '08, 13:01

IceKilla wrote:it's going to be a sweet track :8) i think we're the biggest presence on the creative writing section right now. besides steve spag. :y:



I workin now, wait till i come back, :tounge2: ..... :worship:
Nice rhymes, easy flow to it, i'ma download it as it comes bro
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Re: Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Requiem » Sep 21st, '08, 18:34

sweet man ^, thx for the support, we do what we can :8)
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Re: Burn You Down (Feat. Ice Killa)

Postby Solace » Sep 21st, '08, 19:06

Arabian Shady wrote:
IceKilla wrote:it's going to be a sweet track :8) i think we're the biggest presence on the creative writing section right now. besides steve spag. :y:



I workin now, wait till i come back, :tounge2: ..... :worship:
Nice rhymes, easy flow to it, i'ma download it as it comes bro
Peace


haha we waiting ;)

yeah thanks, you better download it :angry: haha jk.
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