Money

[Emadyville]

Another song I'm probably going to feature on, this ones about money. I wanted to make it different, so I need some feedback. Please! Thanks.

This country’s going crazy about energy loss,
Taxes are rough with all of the penalty costs,
Low income jobs from high school fail outs,
Seven hundred billion in government bail outs,
Corporate greed causes a stock market crisis,
Wallets are empty so a place like Target entices,
As we still remain focused on far-fetched vices,
We need to regain cause life’s hard-get dices,
And roll them until it’s all gone and depleted,
We competed for green but greed superseded,
No need to repeat-it now we bleed for conceited,
White collar scum bags who have fleed and retreated,
So now I work the 9 to 5 on the grind to survive,
Revive my mind with rap while the rhymes provide,
Me with the pride to spit as my wallet screams mayday,
These words are all I need it’s my green and this is payday…

[mcZu]

Liked it, you used some nice multies there, nice rhyme-scheme
Lyrics were nice, liked the ending

So now I work the 9 to 5 on the grind to survive,
Revive my mind with rap while the rhymes provide,
Me with the pride to spit as my wallet screams mayday,
These words are all I need it’s my green and this is payday…

Overall great a piece

[picture me rollin]

yo man i liked this rhyme man good job.i liked how u flowed and structerd it.

[Emadyville]

Thanks for the feed guys.

[Robbie G]

Loved it man.

[Emadyville]

Loved it man.

Thanks

[Darkblade44431]

Good concept, again.
and nice lyrics.
nothin else i can think of, lol....
keep it up though