Rock Bottom (quick write)

[neversnooze]

sometimes when ur feeling down, writing it down on paper makes u feel alittle better, so that what i have done(went along as i wrote)

feel free to criticize but dont stab me to hard

its not religious or anything just desperation when hope is wearing thin
enjoy my sorrow haha

pushing until I am smushing my enemy's
responsibilites tied around my hands
locked like a locket wrapped around my back
trapped untapped to society,
people with born ignorance to survive
like ignoring a soul is this a moral
begging for stressless or a world to unfold with
forgivenness so I may be freed from being dejected

rock bottom led me to only madden
only worsens, specifics hid within curtains
inside a churchs holy doors, a man that priest
hopes for you with his faith with the use of a bible
to be trusted ,when its rejected, is it beneficial

collecting money from gods sons and daughters
from open pockets to my hollow sack
stealing is salutary for my unfilled belly
rock bottom, uncontagious to the heart feeling
what is placed into the plate money
enters into my empty pouch
rock bottom is my foundation ,

[mcZu]

It's a nice written piece, but I would see it more as poetry, it didn't rhyme that much,
but still it's sick as in a poem, really great lines
You could really write some great lyrics, if you would focus on rhyming
I liked it

[neversnooze]

thankx mczu i would like to write lyrics but no artist wants to sing it(i guess its because ppl want to put that effort in there own work then use others which i respect)

[mcZu]

Why don't you try rapping yourself, or singing.....?
You could use your own lyrics and rap or sing...