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Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 18th, '08, 00:51

i havent put one up so i decided to do one.


Ayo, freestyle, Epiphany

Back off, telling me youll teach me a lesson,
in fact your the student, im the professor,
and your failing, in common sense and rap,
cause originality what you mostly lack,
the best thing you wrote is 1 tenth of Fack,
you see how shitty that shit musta been, wack,
So come on, grapple me, attack me like you said you would,
man if you stopped giving head you could,
but for now, i gotta say buh bye,
I dont need to waste my time on some gay guy

Im not good with freestyles at all. All feedback is appreciated.
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Re: Freestyle

Postby JMG » Oct 18th, '08, 00:57

it was aight for a freestyle, u defently got potensial stick with it.
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 18th, '08, 01:06

Thanks, i love it when people say i got potential. Everyone says that, so i guess i truely do :)

Thanks for checkin it man :y:
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Re: Freestyle

Postby neversnooze » Oct 18th, '08, 01:39

i like your freestyle man, and the 1 tenth of fack(goodone) made me giggle, u have potential with words and flowing

im not very good at giving feed, but im trying
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 18th, '08, 01:40

No problem, i suck at feedback too. Anyways, thanks for your feed, i still appreciate it ;)

Teehee, there goes the potential word again lol. So yeah, thanks :smoking:
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Re: Freestyle

Postby gladimnotsoluble » Oct 18th, '08, 02:26

You're terrible. You have no potential








lol i'm kidding, the beginning actually started off pretty well, the lesson proffessor, fack rhymes were all good..kinda drifted toward the end "giving head" not so good, but :y:
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 18th, '08, 02:40

gladimnotsoluble wrote:You're terrible. You have no potential








lol i'm kidding, the beginning actually started off pretty well, the lesson proffessor, fack rhymes were all good..kinda drifted toward the end "giving head" not so good, but :y:

:laughing:

Thanks man, i tend to have that problem. The lines just get shittier.
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Emadyville » Oct 18th, '08, 03:16

The fack line was nice. Overall pretty good.
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 18th, '08, 03:30

Thanks!
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 19th, '08, 19:44

Haha, that was funny as hell.
I thought it was pretty sick man.

Keep it up!
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Solace » Oct 19th, '08, 20:19

lmao really? Thanks a lot :flower:
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Slim Zaddy » Oct 28th, '08, 15:50

ok , i liked this one alot , keep writing this way , good job :y:
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