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Letting Off Some Steam

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Letting Off Some Steam

Postby Rain Matrix » Oct 28th, '08, 00:59

I've been wearing tha same kicks for Two Years
beef is only something that you childish Fools Fear
I make bodies "float" in rivers like ice cream in Root Beer
you fakes might wanna step aside cuz tha Truth's Here
my lyrical shots will slice you up like a Head Of Lettuce
when homicide asks we'll tell those damn Feds Ya Let Us
destroying your whole crew is nothing short of Easy Bitch
your raps are like kraft macaroni,their tha Cheesiest
whenever I hear your rhymes I pray tha CD Skips
I'll kill your hostage ass if you get Disobediant
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Re: Letting Off Some Steam

Postby Emadyville » Oct 28th, '08, 01:35

"Pray the cd skips" was fucking nice, I liked it, didn't recognize at first with the new icons up. :y: :y:
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


I love you Daren
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Re: Letting Off Some Steam

Postby Solace » Oct 28th, '08, 02:31

That was fucking ill man hahah. That line killed me, the cd skip one. nice multies, good flow to it. And the lyrics were nice too "I make bodies "float" in rivers like ice cream in Root Beer"

This line reminded me of a line LL Cool J spit (Your rhymes are cheesy, you found them in a mousetrap)

"your raps are like kraft macaroni,their tha Cheesiest'

Good Job man!
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Re: Letting Off Some Steam

Postby Ka0t1c » Oct 29th, '08, 00:22

great use of words, very good to see this...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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