Life man is tight
You can’t take a breath in it, it’s dark u need a light
Beside the light u need a respite to flip ur thoughts right
Go to a beach clear your thoughts off and reside
Bench back on a seat and twist your mind go high
I know you feeln weak so let me speak da only thing u need is a revive
Don’t disguise this act’s aint nice
Be a man hold yourself on, don’t vipe
You can control your life by your type
Sad and happiness u can pick it. It’s your life
Drugs and being homeless u can alter it usin ur mind
Don’t let girls screw your life this ain’t wise
Just live it one day per day at a time
Always be hopeful and your fortune will cross by
Just listen to my rhyme and keep it in your mind.
appreciate feedback ..
life is tight
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Re: life is tight
by Xray » Nov 5th, '08, 20:57
that piece is tighter!!
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Re: life is tight
by Solace » Nov 6th, '08, 02:32
I think this has to be one of your best pieces. Nice lyrics. And i mean it too. I think flow was fine. Grammar was also fixed compared to your other pieces 
Liked how you ended each line with a word that rhymed with the first line (tight)
PS. If you dont mind could you check out my piece which is not named right now?
Liked how you ended each line with a word that rhymed with the first line (tight)PS. If you dont mind could you check out my piece which is not named right now?
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Re: life is tight
by Cwayon_Murder » Nov 6th, '08, 04:56
I offer the suggestion that you change the title to "Life is Tighter Than a 10-Year-Old"
Nice verse, btw.
Nice verse, btw.
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Re: life is tight
by lilrossy » Nov 6th, '08, 10:17
yeah man good post. you had sum good lines in it that i liked. you keep gettin better, keep it
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Re: life is tight
by Slim Zaddy » Nov 6th, '08, 14:28
Xray wrote:that piece is tighter!!
thanks pal , i appreciate that
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Re: life is tight
by Slim Zaddy » Nov 6th, '08, 14:30
shadymademe wrote:I think this has to be one of your best pieces. Nice lyrics. And i mean it too. I think flow was fine. Grammar was also fixed compared to your other pieces
PS. If you dont mind could you check out my piece which is not named right now?
thanks shaymademe .. i'm glad that you like it ,., actually this is the one that i though that no one will like it ,, but it turns to be the opposite ,, i will check yours ..
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Re: life is tight
by Slim Zaddy » Nov 6th, '08, 14:30
lilrossy wrote:yeah man good post. you had sum good lines in it that i liked. you keep gettin better, keep it
thanks
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Re: life is tight
by mcZu » Nov 8th, '08, 18:37
Not bad man, liked it
You kept it real and used some nice rhymes, flow was ok
Overall nice verse man
Keep them coming
You kept it real and used some nice rhymes, flow was ok
Overall nice verse man
Keep them coming
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Re: life is tight
by MC Anonymous » Nov 8th, '08, 22:56
I like this one! You can feel the emotion in it :]
Good write
Good write
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Re: life is tight
by Slim Zaddy » Nov 9th, '08, 11:27
MC Anonymous wrote:I like this one! You can feel the emotion in it :]
Good write
thanks bro
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Re: life is tight
by Slim Zaddy » Nov 9th, '08, 11:29
mcZu wrote:Not bad man, liked it
You kept it real and used some nice rhymes, flow was ok
Overall nice verse man
Keep them coming
i appreciate that pal ..
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