NEW - Scattered Thoughts

[Solace]

Blehhh...

[Verse 1]
Ive got no lyricism or any famous friends,
One day, I know I'll be the man making the trends,
Me and John, similar and different in many ways,
We can start an argument or freestyle together any day,
From North Carolina to Ontario, nation by nation,
President to Prime Minister, dedication to application,
Wackest to greatest, haters to loyal fans embracing,
Layin on my bed with a pad and a pen, time is wasting,
First recorded track was wack,
psht? Burn You Down worse than Fack,
But im glad it was shown, glad Ice released it,
Cause then I found my problems, and my skills increasing,
We all come from shit, and look at the stars,
Eminem, Tupac, Jay-Z & Nas,
Just look how far they got, now they hot,
dead or not we bump 'em even when they shot.
Rest in peace Shakur and Holton, you were great,
There was only one of each of you, unforgotten,
The sad thing is you still get hate, yo.

[Chorus x2]
As the time flies by, you never really notice a big difference,
span that time out, take a second look, it better take your interest,
Even I, one of the wackest of them all,
Still got a chance to get on to that wall,
Im tired and done, I aint taking bullshit,
Dump some on me and im taking a full clip,
Tired of life, but gotta keep going,
Writing this shit just keeps mind my from blowing.

[Verse 2]
Flying like a bird, I'll take a shit on whoevers under,
On the mic im deadly, my voice is as hard as thunder,
Used to give a fuck, now I give a fuck less,
Gimme a fat chick that looks like a man wit' no chest,
no breasts, man this shits disabled,
Like a fat man too lazy to plug in the cable,
Hip-hop and rap was a big influence,
started sleeping in class, watching porn and getting into it,
Sometimes I go to school saying I wanna quit,
But i need a future and an education so in the meantime i just write shit,
With depression, the mic is my ultimate weapon,
Done with taking shit, screaming FUCK is my obsession!

[Chorus x3]
[Chorus Fades]

[Slim Zaddy]

no man really this shit is hot , good flow ,, nice lyrics 2 .. and i liked how u arranged your thoughs with each other ,, so i guess u did a good job here pal . just keep it

[Solace]

no man really this shit is hot , good flow ,, nice lyrics 2 .. and i liked how u arranged your thoughs with each other ,, so i guess u did a good job here pal . just keep it

Thanks a lot man!

[lilrossy]

yeah man, nice piece. i really liked the last verse, it was pretty cool.

[Xray]

I agree this is hot.

[Solace]

Thanks you two, i really appreciate it!

[The Toy Soldier]

:worship: Thanks you two, i really appreciate it!

you need to get the fuck out of the creative writing section

honestly just gtfo

..............and go to the audio section. Big leagues now bro big leagues.

[Solace]

:worship: Thanks you two, i really appreciate it!

you need to get the fuck out of the creative writing section

honestly just gtfo

..............and go to the audio section. Big leagues now bro big leagues.

Lmaooo for a second there i was like "wtf " haha. Thanks mann

[mcZu]

Nice job dude... It's a nice piece
Only thing left, is to record it.. Next step that is

Keep up the good work, I enjoyed reading it

[Solace]

Nice job dude... It's a nice piece
Only thing left, is to record it.. Next step that is

Keep up the good work, I enjoyed reading it

Damn man second piece i ever wrote that got these consistent reviews

Thanks a lot man, i really appreciate you checking it

[Requiem]

is my reaction. holy crap man, that's unbelievable. GREAT verses, made perfect sense, despite the title. it has consistent flow, and content is heartfelt and thought out. AWESOME job man
2nd verse is SICK. lmfao at that "watching porn and getting into it"

also, the fact that u admit ur mistakes ^first verse, and go back and work on it, shows u've grown a lot

KEEP THIS SHIT UP now u need to record it, after our collabs, and i'll kill a beat for u

[Solace]

:o is my reaction. holy crap man, that's unbelievable. GREAT verses, made perfect sense, despite the title. it has consistent flow, and content is heartfelt and thought out. AWESOME job man
2nd verse is SICK. lmfao at that "watching porn and getting into it"

also, the fact that u admit ur mistakes ^first verse, and go back and work on it, shows u've grown a lot

KEEP THIS SHIT UP now u need to record it, after our collabs, and i'll kill a beat for u

Thanks mmannn! Yeah, i do wanna admit some stuff. I know i was pretty wack, just clearing stuff up And damn that would be sick, a recorded version.

[Solace]

Question+Bump: Which Sounds Better:

We all come from shit and look at the stars,
Eminem, Nas, Tupac, Jay-Z, look how far they got,
Now they hot, dead or not,

or

We all come from shit, and look at the stars,
Eminem, Tupac, Jay-Z & Nas,
Just look how for they got, now they hot,
dead or not we bump 'em even when they shot.

?

[Requiem]

2nd one, definitely better flow and use of multies

[Solace]

Thanks, ill use that then. But...i dont see any multies?