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Postby James R. » Dec 3rd, '08, 03:57

Just trying to keep myself from going into another writers block. Not really about anything. Just havin some fun lol

Yeah, cruising down 279
They wanna hate on my time? Dude, let em try
Cuz y’all knew I was next soon as I said a rhyme
And brothers will do anything just to get at mine
Name one song you had that I felt this man should get help
It’s your life play the hand you were dealt
And though it’s God given hustlers know it’s hard livin
And it’s not a Vegas game there’s no card splittin
No second chances, every flop is blind
Steady checkin for a can to drop your stock behind
I hope ya lyrics weren’t thought with hip-hop in mind
Ya bitch got to shine while you’re getting dropped and signed
Now that’s a down bitch as long as you can sound rich
But once your funds are gone you’re down and out quick
It’s the price of fame to light your name and ice a range
You might complain about the game but you like the change
Hollywood livin with women that never stop givin
You get with the image you tryin to stack up the digits
I won’t front and lie cuz I’m currency minded
I’d spit fake shit but I can’t currently find it
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Re: Random Shit

Postby lilrossy » Dec 3rd, '08, 05:24

i thought it was alright. thought start & the finish was good.
sum of the lines i liked were "Cuz y’all knew I was next soon as I said a rhyme" & "I hope ya lyrics weren’t thought with hip-hop in mind".
also it flowed nicely. overall it wasn't a bad drop.
keep it up :y:
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After I came, fucked em with they own leg
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Re: Random Shit

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 3rd, '08, 17:42

it's hot man ,, it sounds good to me , rhymes and flow were sick .. keep dropping bro :y:
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Re: Random Shit

Postby mcZu » Dec 3rd, '08, 18:28

Some sick shit right there considering it's just random.
Liked the rhyme-pattern you had there, lyrics were great.
It flowed nice, vocab was nice.
Overall a nice piece man, and keep writting, a writers block is fucking annoying.
So just keep dropping 'em :y:
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Re: Random Shit

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 3rd, '08, 22:14

This was very good for what it was. If you would had told me this was a song, I would've been critical on you, but because you made this without subject matter, and it came out this good, my review would be irrelevant. Great job. 9/10.
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Re: Random Shit

Postby James R. » Dec 4th, '08, 03:53

Lol thanks guys. And yeah had this been a song I wouldn't have even thought about posting it here. Just trying to fend off this god damn writers block so I'm just keeping the juices flowing. Unfortunately I can't/don't write songs when I'm not feeling the emotion or some inspiration. It's the only way to write for me. But yeah, real shit coming soon. Thanks again guys.
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Re: Random Shit

Postby Solace » Dec 4th, '08, 03:55

James R. wrote:Lol thanks guys. And yeah had this been a song I wouldn't have even thought about posting it here. Just trying to fend off this god damn writers block so I'm just keeping the juices flowing. Unfortunately I can't/don't write songs when I'm not feeling the emotion or some inspiration. It's the only way to write for me. But yeah, real shit coming soon. Thanks again guys.

Yeh i know what you mean, anyways great shit man :y: 9/10, keep them coming :) Good flow, lyrics were good and consistent.
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