Emadyville "My World"

by **Emadyville** » Dec 8th, '08, 22:04

I've not posted creative writing in awhile cause everything I've been saving for my mixtape. But I just wrote this, and wanted your feedback. I wrote this in an "insane" mindset. Bold lines are going to have much more emotion and anger. So enjoy:

These words are so complex they woven-see-the-tapestry,
The game was a Queen, now I’m Bohemian Rhapsody,
With this stream-of-consciousness, I try to see the nonsense-less,
I’m right between awesomeness and being straight lost-in-this,
It came and went, as chain events have my brain intense,
And so insane I guess that I can never be the same in this,
Because sanity, is the key and you lock it back,
So I sit and wait, contemplate where the problems at,
My claw is wrapped on the pen in my palm it’s back,
Paint the picture with words, the elixir for insomniacs,
To draw the facts so vividly each image-be sawed in half,
Chopped and screwed, as I often do, put my psalms in rap,
And now I assume, that my maker missed a circuit,
But however it goes I can’t question is-it-worth it,
As I’m able to do what I do and do so picture-perfect,
That even the most intelligent, will still misinterpret…

You have stepped into MY WORLD,
You will never be the same after this,
Once you step into MY WORLD,
There is no love, no hugs, no kiss,
Do you want to step into MY WORLD,
I doubt you can even handle this,
You can never step into MY WORLD,
Because you have no clue even what it is…

You heard the first verse and what does it appear-to-be,
Clearly something’s tearing-me down and wearing-me,
As everything you I hear-I-see, what to do, where to be,
You think it’s fear-in-me but I’m in the clear spiritually,
And the fact is that I’m carefree and carefully,
Using this sparingly because I have apparently,
Gone of the deep end, tried to touch the sky-just,
Leaped off the bridge, jumped from the highest,
Landed on my feet, and right on this tightrope,
In shark infested waters so I can only hope,
I can handle this time bomb and dismantle,
Before it explodes and I’m blown over the channel,
And eaten by the sharks as there’s no purpose-in,
Even trying to swim away, as they’re all circling,
They’re out for blood and I can feel their hunger,
And I can’t do shit because my heart is punctured…

Hook:

You heard the second verse, what does it appear-to-be,
Clearly something’s tearing-me down and wearing-me,
To the point I repeat lines and work-the-chances,
That maybe you’ll understand all circumstances,
I write about pain but you can insert-anguish,
Cause life’s a bitch and all the sinners-thank-us,
For it being over they head like an angels halo,
So I stay-low and pray-for days less painful,
I’ve been pulled apart and ripped from all angles,
I don’t care if I’m heartless to kill you must strangle,
So I’ve given you options, I have no heart to take,
And my minds out this world so I start to fake,
Like I still have it, but I’ll be throwing respect at,
Anyone able and willing to snap my neck back,
So if you want me to shut up I’ll make ya list,
You don’t have to cut my tongue just break my wrist…

by **The GameKeeper** » Dec 8th, '08, 22:17

Definitely Dope... definitely... K Mart... D. Dubs, super dope lyric writer...

Hot shit my man... :worship:

by **James R.** » Dec 8th, '08, 22:48

Im getting sick of people posting shit I can't feed. It was dope. The only thing I'd have to say is that the flow can be a little hard to follow, but it happens with text. Songs are hard to follow when you're reading and not listening. Keep it up man.