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Definition

Postby mcZu » Dec 9th, '08, 22:10

Something I just wrote, trying to keep on writting while I have the time to do so.

Blending reality with fiction, rhymes stay vivid
fixed my assets on intuition, time to be liquid
haters are liable for this prison, drop platinum bars
lock them up behind phrases, hiphop god of war
like the fourth planet in order from the sun
I stay high like a fort and rule like Amon
Standing on the amazing seventh cloud above
Handing out tokens of art, stay fly like a dove
This Semitic dude has scimitar lines with a curve
sharp edged rude technics evolve in the real cure
'cause clearly of my sickness I drive them to the edge
pause nearly a sec, trick them, dive them of the fence
I be like a Aztec, charge them like a tech and then rest
So take this and rake your brains upon what I made
Though I stake this upone my honour and then fade
Away trying to define my self, each rhyme of my shelf
May try to give a definition of Zu's mind state
So I say I tried to define my self in this stage..

Feedback would be appreciated :flower:
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Re: Definition

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 12th, '08, 16:56

it's a nice verse ,, rhymes were decent , flow was okay , overall , it's good . 7.5/10 , keep it up bro. :y:
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Re: Definition

Postby mcZu » Dec 12th, '08, 18:26

Thanks for checking man :y:
Appreciate it :b:
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Re: Definition

Postby Slim Zaddy » Dec 12th, '08, 20:10

mcZu wrote:Thanks for checking man :y:
Appreciate it :b:


you're more than welcome :b: :b: :b:
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Re: Definition

Postby neversnooze » Dec 13th, '08, 04:50

this was hard to follow but it was clever "definition of Zu"
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Re: Definition

Postby mcZu » Dec 13th, '08, 18:33

^Thanks, appreciate you chechking this out :y:
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