lil wayne diss red corpses [red magic

[tjb]

red corpses [lil wayne diss] [on red magic track]
red corpses red corpses shoulda worn kev outside ya fortress
chorus: red corpses red corpses used the guns on wayne outside the fortress [you out the house!]
red corpes red corpses shot wayne right dead outside the fortress

verse1: ya ya yea im a rookie in tha game but im comin up fast and im sure to spark a flame
yea call me arsonist cuz i burn this wayne track to the ground yea to ashes i smash this
like a highway accident a crash like think of busted stuff think of u busted up now whats up
yea the sky an u know ima fly like a bird like a plane wait hell no superman and im piercing like
a deagle an when u hear one of my rhymes u gets like old like feeble but call me mr. seagull
cuz i can spot the latest trash an impeach em so fast its not legal like an illegal

chorus

drop more lata when im done ill put it to the red magic beat i rapped ovr the game an wayne an it sounded aight do anybody have red magic intrumentals?

[tjb]

feedback appreciated

[tjb]

red magic, houdini shift vanish serenely an pop what u messin around for
u release so many tracks ur quality goes lower an lower an ichop u down faster then a lawn mower ha theres no swagga like urs but hoo the fck cares cuz u gotta be somebody like nickelback said gotta be somebody

an im like
1 carta
2 carta
3 carta
4 how many carta to lil waynes out the door?
look how easy i even the scores like im a new hope
not attack of the clone wars

[Slim Zaddy]

it was not bad . It’s good .. Lyrics were good 2. but man . Structure is missed up.. Fix it, cuz it's hard to read it this way and flow through it.. Just fix it and it will be good .. Put commas 2 .. Anyway keep it up ..

[tjb]

REVISED verse 1



Red corpses [lil Wayne diss] [on red magic track]
red corpses red corpses shoulda worn kev outside ya fortress
chorus: red corpses red corpses used the guns on Wayne outside the fortress
[You out the house!]
red corpses red corpses shot Wayne right dead outside the fortress

VERSE 1 : ya ya yea im a rookie in tha game, but im comin up fast,
and im sure to spark a flame an your sure to come in last,
yea call me arsonist, cuz i burn this wayne track to the ground,
yea to ashes, i smash this, like a highway accident, a crash.
like think of busted stuff, think of u busted up now, whats up
yea the sky, an u know ima fly, like a bird, like a plane, wait hell no superman,
and im piercing like a deagle, an when u hear one of my rhymes u gets like old like feeble but call me mr. seagull cuz i can spot the latest trash, an impeach em so fast its not legal
like and illegal, like a Mexican, like, who u messin wit?
Me! thats who, this is a lil wayne diss, now lil wayne u cant tell TJB shit.

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VERSE 2:

Tht was only the 1st verse, I got quite a bit of energy ima bout to burst.
Now put off, like as much as jeezy puts on, an kanyeezy will
Help you out wit another love song,
an watd u for thankgivin? No turkey 4, u but I bet u ate a bird an I bet he loved it to
but I bet he flew the coup, 100% truth, spittin from these lips,
but I only gotta pair wayne, an there way above my hips, haha
u say no nigga got swagga like urs, but ima die laughin atcha
cuz hoo the fuck cares?
ha id wish u try harder, cuz if I ever make it big,
ill wear the crown proud, like you thought u did
call ur songs a auction an ill take the cheapest bid
cuz I don’t pay CASH MONEY for cheap ass shit
.

[Slim Zaddy]

VERSE 2:

Tht was only the 1st verse, I got quite a bit of energy ima bout to burst.
Now put off, like as much as jeezy puts on, an kanyeezy will
Help you out wit another love song,
an watd u for thankgivin? No turkey 4, u but I bet u ate a bird an I bet he loved it to
but I bet he flew the coup, 100% truth, spittin from these lips,
but I only gotta pair wayne, an there way above my hips, haha
u say no ***** got swagga like urs, but ima die laughin atcha
cuz hoo the fuck cares?
ha id wish u try harder, cuz if I ever make it big,
ill wear the crown proud, like you thought u did
call ur songs a auction an ill take the cheapest bid
cuz I don’t pay CASH MONEY for cheap ass shit
.

yes man this way better ,, now it look good ..

REVISED verse 1



Red corpses [lil Wayne diss] [on red magic track]
red corpses red corpses shoulda worn kev outside ya fortress
chorus: red corpses red corpses used the guns on Wayne outside the fortress
[You out the house!]
red corpses red corpses shot Wayne right dead outside the fortress

VERSE 1 : ya ya yea im a rookie in tha game, but im comin up fast,
and im sure to spark a flame an your sure to come in last,
yea call me arsonist, cuz i burn this wayne track to the ground,
yea to ashes, i smash this, like a highway accident, a crash.
like think of busted stuff, think of u busted up now, whats up
yea the sky, an u know ima fly, like a bird, like a plane, wait hell no superman,
and im piercing like a deagle, an when u hear one of my rhymes u gets like old like feeble but call me mr. seagull cuz i can spot the latest trash, an impeach em so fast its not legal
like and illegal, like a Mexican, like, who u messin wit?
Me! thats who, this is a lil wayne diss, now lil wayne u cant tell TJB shit.