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The Final Note.

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 13th, '08, 14:37

This write is a more personal write... and it may not make sense but I'll show my fam on TR anyway. :y:

the sudden pain ravages against the walls of my cranium
as I begin to write a note of what I was gonna say to them
''my life didn't turn out the way I wanted it to be
slowly, my mind wandered the corridors of my body through me
it discovered jewelry covered in blood with a hole in the center
and in that hole was the engraved letters, my soul's trapped in December
hardened forever in ice, unable to express emotions or feeling
with a heart that pumps bitter blood, and my erosion is sealing
the final chapter of my book of life, as I took the knife
and sliced vertically to avoid failure, I finally shook the strife''
blurry vision begins to take control, I'm scared to go
the knife falls on the tiled floor, I don't know where to go
everything gets darker, I can't talk, it's like I'm wearing a muzzle
I slowly travel to the other side...
but there's no light at the end of the tunnel.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: The Final Note.

Postby Emadyville » Dec 13th, '08, 17:35

The rhymes were great as usual, the ending was perfect, it just didn't flow very well. Overall great job tho :y:
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Re: The Final Note.

Postby mcZu » Dec 13th, '08, 18:42

I agree with Emadyville, it was great. Just the flow wasn't that smooth.
Nontheless it's a great verse, enjoyed it :y:
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Re: The Final Note.

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 13th, '08, 18:43

mcZu wrote:I agree with Emadyville, it was great. Just the flow wasn't that smooth.
Nontheless it's a great verse, enjoyed it :y:

Thanks both of ya :y:
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Re: The Final Note.

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 13th, '08, 19:20

wow, amazing, i like it, very good imagery :y: :worship: :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: The Final Note.

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 13th, '08, 19:22

Kaotic wrote:wow, amazing, i like it, very good imagery :y: :worship: :y:

Thanks bro. :y:
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Re: The Final Note.

Postby James R. » Dec 14th, '08, 00:55

Hot verse man. The flow was choppy, but that's extremely easy to fix. The lyrics and everything behind it was directly on point. Loved it man
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Re: The Final Note.

Postby Solace » Dec 14th, '08, 00:57

That was crazy man, good job. I couldnt put up the flow but since you got a flow in your mind, its just perfect. Keep it up MC :worship:
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