Lyricist's Sound

[Ka0t1c]

i'm floating around outta control
not knowing when i'm going back down
so somebody should now show
me just how i can approach the flat ground
well i hope you'll act now while i'm still close
before i'm nowhere to be found
cuz the clouds will engulf my career and i'll drown
that i swear, i'm not proud, what i host
i share it about for my peers and they're loud
here's a big toast from my years to the crowd
cuz my spirit does post to carry this lyricist's sound...

i guess it's an intro to something upcoming

[James R.]

It was ok. Not liking how you have lines in there that don't have a corresponding line with them, but I can get over it. Very basic. If it's an intro to something else that's on a much much higher level (because I've seen you write dope shit) then cool, but as a normal piece I'd consider serious revision.