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Freestyle

Postby Solace » Dec 19th, '08, 04:27

How ya doing mister, say Hi to your sister,
Tell her that her tits are tight and oh baby I miss her,
What? Got slapped in the face,
Feeling more gay than Jack in Will & Grace,
Your gunna be disgraced if you fight against me,
Cause I'm on a streak, and you can never best me,
So dont even test me, or ill cut off both of your testies,
Itll be messy, so its best we forget about this matter, just eat,
So come on other rappers, say what you like,
I know that I'm wack, but better than what you're like,
So kick me twice, even use a couple weapons,
I dont care if i die, rather go to Hell than Heaven,
I never cared for your words, its a foreign language for me,
Your speaking Spanish, making up stories,
So its interesting, and if you try to get the best of me,
I promise I aint gunna be that friendly.
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 19th, '08, 05:12

no, u gotta come out guns blazin... keep trying, not completely bad
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Requiem » Dec 19th, '08, 05:25

^pretty good shadymademe :y: started out really strong and sick. love the whole sister line. great start, kind of got dull towards the end. but the beginning is ill. 7/10 decent peice :happy:
R.I.P. Proof.
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 19th, '08, 06:02

it sounded like you were more interested in rhyming then coming at the listener hard, maybe it was just me but I've seen better from you :y:
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Re: Freestyle

Postby James R. » Dec 20th, '08, 00:27

Seen you do tons better. The biggest issue is as been stated. It wasn't gripping.
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Solace » Dec 20th, '08, 04:21

Thanks guys ^
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Re: Freestyle

Postby Solace » Dec 20th, '08, 18:40

Chet Starr wrote:Yea you can do alot better...like that song I just gave feed on lol :p

But that wasnt a freestyle now was it? :shifty:
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