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Re: Coleon - Endless Seas Of Needless Breaths

Postby gutawafang » Jan 8th, '10, 04:59

great flow man. I managed to rap all of it out. Awesome.

nicest lines
Tend to play the part of fool, leave that in the past with you
That’s far from hard to do, for deceiving me and acting cruel
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Re: Coleon - Needless Breaths

Postby SliK » Jan 8th, '10, 05:07

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Re: Coleon - Needless Breaths

Postby Edge » Jan 8th, '10, 05:27

i like it a lot... goes perfect with the beat :y:
u should make another verse or two with a chorus
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Re: Coleon - Needless Breaths

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 8th, '10, 05:30

Good shit Co...I'm likin this new flow you're using....its working for you
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Re: Coleon - Needless Breaths

Postby bullet_boy46 » Jan 8th, '10, 05:31

what edge said,, i liked it :worship:
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Re: Coleon - Needless Breaths

Postby Yah-hah » Jan 8th, '10, 08:33

Yeah man flow was ill in this piece. Good shit brother
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