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A song to my brother...

Postby Jay-19 » Feb 7th, '06, 00:06

My half-brother commited suicide just one month before he was supposed to turn 18 years old. :(
And this is my way to tell him how much I loved him, even though I'm not sure he can see it....


You should've seen your funeral with all those loving people
You was a little different, but none of us are equal
At least a ton flowers on your coffin in the curch
I know you have a good time in the heaven but it hurts
To know that you no longer are with us on this earth
Still owe you little money bro, but you will get 'em dawg
When I think of you brother, it's just like a fuckin' fog
But you've walked through the pearly gates and that can't be bad
I know you a had a rough time but I want you back
When I saw your for the last time, you was just asleep
I can barely go sleep, becasue I'm layin' on a sheet
This is a tribute to you, and I hope that you can hear it
When I saw you in that coffin, man I no longer fear it
I'm talkin' about death, because you looked so damn peacefull
When you're up there with the Lord, I hope that you will be good
Drink a couple beers, have some pizza and some sea-food

You missed so many years, and you missed so many tears
But you helped me and many more get rid of this big fear
Becasue death is a good thing, you saved it for the last
But the best for you man, well it did just came too fast

You did had your girl, it was meant to be you and her
But instead of living love, she was at your funeral
She cried and we cried, we cried more than 3 times
I wrote a poem to you man, I hope that you have read it
You will get those little pennies I owe, you wanna bet it?
'Cause I'll be seeing you bro, but just not in this lifetime
When I think about you homie, I smile wide and eyes shine
You disappeared first, then another friend passed
Life goes on, but you was only a kid, and now that's whack
Why did you had to leave? Why did you had to go?
Life can be good, but your life was tough fo' sho
I miss you at the dinner, and the way you ate your food
When I heard about your death I just sat there like a fool
I couldn't understand it, I was confused and empty
But life goes on as said, and I hope you did a good entry
They say heaven is a paradise, so my feeling now is; envy

You missed so many years, and you missed so many tears
But you helped me and many more get rid of this big fear
Because death is a good thing, you saved it for the last
But the best for you man, well it did just came too fast

:crybye: R.I.P Brother!
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Postby Curious » Feb 7th, '06, 00:13

hey killah, that is a really beautiful way of commemorating your brother n i hope it helps u deal with the emotional chaos inside which always remains when u lose somebody close to u so tragically -

may ur brother rest in peace
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Postby Ivy » Feb 7th, '06, 03:58

I cried...I really did...that's so loving and caring and senstiveness shows....that's great...and sorry about your bro...
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Postby Vettori » Feb 7th, '06, 06:04

Head up bro, Tough times, But the best is yet to come
I really liked that, It gave me goosebumps...And i'm actually thinkin about doin a tribute song, to a 17 year old guy, who in my school died over the weekend....I don't really no what it feels like to lose someone close, But i know what it feels like to lose someone at all, May ur bro Rest in peace dawg

"Faith"

R.I.P Tim Ngo, will never be forgotten :'(
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Postby Jay-19 » Feb 7th, '06, 17:45

Thank ya'll guys!

It felt better to get rid of some emotions by writing this.
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Postby Inzanity » Feb 7th, '06, 19:42

really nice job I love the emotion in it it was really deep
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Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 7th, '06, 19:44

keep it up, that is very heart warming, yet sad with a happiness to it
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Postby Speech » Feb 7th, '06, 19:50

You should've seen your funeral with all those loving people
You was a little different, but none of us are equal
At least a ton flowers on your coffin in the curch
I know you have a good time in the heaven but it hurts
To know that you no longer are with us on this earth
Still owe you little money bro, but you will get 'em dawg
When I think of you brother, it's just like a ######' fog
But you've walked through the pearly gates and that can't be bad
I know you a had a rough time but I want you back
When I saw your for the last time, you was just asleep
I can barely go sleep, becasue I'm layin' on a sheet
This is a tribute to you, and I hope that you can hear it
When I saw you in that coffin, man I no longer fear it
I'm talkin' about death, because you looked so damn peacefull
When you're up there with the Lord, I hope that you will be good
Drink a couple beers, have some pizza and some sea-food

You missed so many years, and you missed so many tears
But you helped me and many more get rid of this big fear
Becasue death is a good thing, you saved it for the last
But the best for you man, well it did just came too fast

You did had your girl, it was meant to be you and her
But instead of living love, she was at your funeral
She cried and we cried, we cried more than 3 times
I wrote a poem to you man, I hope that you have read it
You will get those little pennies I owe, you wanna bet it?
'Cause I'll be seeing you bro, but just not in this lifetime
When I think about you homie, I smile wide and eyes shine
You disappeared first, then another friend passed
Life goes on, but you was only a kid, and now that's whack
Why did you had to leave? Why did you had to go?
Life can be good, but your life was tough fo' sho
I miss you at the dinner, and the way you ate your food
When I heard about your death I just sat there like a fool
I couldn't understand it, I was confused and empty
But life goes on as said, and I hope you did a good entry
They say heaven is a paradise, so my feeling now is; envy

You missed so many years, and you missed so many tears
But you helped me and many more get rid of this big fear
Because death is a good thing, you saved it for the last
But the best for you man, well it did just came too fast





homie i have 2 say........this was touching man....i don really now how it is loosin sumbody i really luv but man.....
homie keep it up



ahm i know its kinda weird.....maybe crazy.......but would u like 2 make a track outta this?
it would be summdin i would listen 24 h a day homie........not cuz its a tight track(well it could be but ya know.....) just cuz it would be a very good emotional song bro......just an idea homie........

AGAIN!!! KEEP IT UP
and.....IM SORRY :'( :'( :'(
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Postby misa » Feb 8th, '06, 00:07

this is really good , so simple yet so gr8 and touchin , made me cry , iam srry abt ur brother :(
may he rest in peace
(( alive enough -- to enD it mySelf ))
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Postby DOPE » Feb 8th, '06, 07:26

mayn! that was some hot shit dawg, fo real!!!,,,,,,,, real good shit
i just read the first couple of lines,,, n just kept readin on ,,,,, till the end,,,,,nice,,,, PEACE

R.I.P to ur bro,,,,,,,,,,, he mustve met Pac n BIG
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Postby Jay-19 » Feb 10th, '06, 00:36

Thank you all for the comments. I am going to record this, as soon as I get money for studio, because i can't really records it on my computer.

And DOPE, I sure hope he've met Pac and Biggie, but he wasn't in to that kinda music, he used to listen to Blind Guardian and heavy-metal... God I hate that music, but still I miss it, because I think about him when I hear it... :'(

But anywas, thank you all for the comments about the song-lyrics and for showin' respect to my brother by write those 3 letters... R.I.P! :flower:
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Postby $0 R3@L » Feb 10th, '06, 00:42

R.I.P

heart goes out to you and your family dude :'(
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Postby NEVER ENOUGH » Feb 11th, '06, 20:16

that such a nice way to empress your feelings ...keep the good work
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Postby Rae » Feb 13th, '06, 00:05

dang! that was really GOOD! you gotta lot of talent! the first time i read it i was at school in the computer lab and i started to cry a little. and all the people around me where like "ashley, whats wrong! i've never seen you cry before!" but anyways THAT WAS REALLY BEAUTIFUL! :'(
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Postby Jay-19 » Feb 13th, '06, 22:35

That's cute MarshellBM, feels good to know you all like it!
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