Is this a good punchline?

[WakeUpShow]

I'm posting it here because not many people check creative writing anymore

If you claim that you're god, then you're god in pig latin.

[Maybe]

It's alright, but it's not particularly clever or strong as a punchline. It seems like more of a good throwaway line to me.

[Blu]

Tbh I have nothing to contribute since I'm not really good with punchlines.

[WakeUpShow]

It's alright, but it's not particularly clever or strong as a punchline. It seems like more of a good throwaway line to me.

ok but did you get the wordplay? god in pig latin= odgay (odd gay). i dunno, thought it was good.

[WakeUpShow]

You'd need a line prior and maybe after to help that punch out.

An odd gay? isn't it odd being gay in the first place?

yeah i suppose, i'll work on it

[5lim5hady]

here u go bro:

claimin' that you hood, up to no good, you're thinkin is backwards cap'n,
sayin' you're a god, thass only true if you're speakin pig latin. [Then explain it]
cuz you're an odd gay, meanin in a circle of homos you'd be the faggot,
smear the queer, kill the pill, you take whatever they do with your ass bitch.

just an idea if u wanna run w/it and make the rhymes line up better with whatever beat you're putting them on so you're hittin the punches at a consistent pace.

[Blu]

here u go bro:

claimin' that you hood, up to no good, you're thinkin is backwards cap'n,
sayin' you're a god, thass only true if you're speakin pig latin. [Then explain it]
cuz you're an odd gay, meanin in a circle of homos you'd be the faggot,
smear the queer, kill the pill, you take whatever they do with your ass bitch.

just an idea if u wanna run w/it and make the rhymes line up better with whatever beat you're putting them on so you're hittin the punches at a consistent pace.

Pretty good if you ask me.

[WakeUpShow]

here u go bro:

claimin' that you hood, up to no good, you're thinkin is backwards cap'n,
sayin' you're a god, thass only true if you're speakin pig latin. [Then explain it]
cuz you're an odd gay, meanin in a circle of homos you'd be the faggot,
smear the queer, kill the pill, you take whatever they do with your ass bitch.

just an idea if u wanna run w/it and make the rhymes line up better with whatever beat you're putting them on so you're hittin the punches at a consistent pace.

that's good, but I don't like explaining my punches because they hit you much harder if you get them yourself.

[classthe_king]

here u go bro:

claimin' that you hood, up to no good, you're thinkin is backwards cap'n,
sayin' you're a god, thass only true if you're speakin pig latin. [Then explain it]
cuz you're an odd gay, meanin in a circle of homos you'd be the faggot,
smear the queer, kill the pill, you take whatever they do with your ass bitch.

just an idea if u wanna run w/it and make the rhymes line up better with whatever beat you're putting them on so you're hittin the punches at a consistent pace.

that's good, but I don't like explaining my punches because they hit you much harder if you get them yourself.

Yeah, do not use that.

just be like

I called him god but I was speakin pig latin instead
Shit, if I battle lupe i'm leavin him scratchin his head

Then just adlib it and be like (odd gay) or somethin

[WakeUpShow]

here u go bro:

claimin' that you hood, up to no good, you're thinkin is backwards cap'n,
sayin' you're a god, thass only true if you're speakin pig latin. [Then explain it]
cuz you're an odd gay, meanin in a circle of homos you'd be the faggot,
smear the queer, kill the pill, you take whatever they do with your ass bitch.

just an idea if u wanna run w/it and make the rhymes line up better with whatever beat you're putting them on so you're hittin the punches at a consistent pace.

that's good, but I don't like explaining my punches because they hit you much harder if you get them yourself.

Yeah, do not use that.

just be like

I called him god but I was speakin pig latin instead
Shit, if I battle lupe i'm leavin him scratchin his head

Then just adlib it and be like (odd gay) or somethin

banging, that's nice. thanks man