Tash8 wrote:what does that have anything to do with this verse:
Throw dirt on me and grow a wildflower
But it's "fuck the world", get a child out her
Yeah, my life a bitch, but you know nothing bout her
Been to hell and back, I can show you vouchers
I'm rolling Sweets, I'm smoking sour
Married to the game but she broke her vows
That's why my bars are full of broken bottles
And my night stands are full of open Bibles
I think about more than I forget
But I don't go around fire expecting not to sweat
And these ***** know I lay them down, make their bed
Bitches try to kick me while I'm down: I'll break your leg
Money outweighing problems on the triple beam
I'm sticking to the script, you ***** skipping scenes
Be good or be good at it
Fucking right I've got my gun, semi-Cartermatic
Yeah, put a dick in their mouth, so I guess it's "fuck what they say"
I'm high as a bitch: up, up and away
Man, I come down in a couple of days
OK, you want me up in the cage, then I'll come out in beast mode
I got this world stuck in the safe, combination is the G-code
It's Weezy motherfucker, blood gang and I'm in bleed mode
All about my dough but I don't even check the peephole
So you can keep knocking but won't knock me down
No love lost, no love found
First four lines, absolutely no internal rhyme scheme, like it's the motherfucking LATE SEVENTIES. Then for some reason he begins the next bar with the same, one-rhyme-at-the-end-of-the-line bullshit as the first bar, which is fine, but after that first line he immediately CEASES TO RHYME. If you're going to use the forced "vows" metaphor in that line, why use "sour" before it. Sour does not rhyme with vows no matter how hard he tries to contort the delivery. Bottles and Bibles is also forced, but fine. Think about more than I forget shit has been used countless times in far more creative ways. And once again he's back to rhyming once at the end of every bar, something Em even sneers at in one of the other tracks on this album. The only two lines that really connected from then on out were the up up and away, come down in a few days, and the flow was absent.
Simplistic shit, and it still happens to be one of his best verses since he blew up. I was a fan through Go DJ. Then he mysteriously forgot how to rap ENTIRELY.