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' Devil On My Bed '
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' Devil On My Bed '
by i4ill » Jan 19th, '10, 12:23
I'm the letters that alphabet never heard about, the words that the lines couldn't manage to gather, the lines that the verses failed to comprehend, the verses that no song would dare to embrace, the song that no pen would ever write down.
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Re: ' Devil On My Bed '
by _Ironic_ » Jan 19th, '10, 17:13
whats up man, returning the feedback:
beat is uhhh. different...pretty damn simple..woulda been better if it was complex.
you got delivery man, you need alot of work on flow though.
-not gonna comment on the quality which is pretty bad
i like beginning softer voice on the hook..not so much the second one.
2nd verse again it's pretty good delivery, like I can hear the emotion on your voice. BUT it doesn't flow together and make it easy to follow
lyrics could be a little better...
overall this was decent, not great...but you got potential man..i could see you advancing with alot more practice
6/10 ( woulda been rated lower if I included quality in this...upp ya microphone game)
peace!
beat is uhhh. different...pretty damn simple..woulda been better if it was complex.
you got delivery man, you need alot of work on flow though.
-not gonna comment on the quality which is pretty bad
i like beginning softer voice on the hook..not so much the second one.
2nd verse again it's pretty good delivery, like I can hear the emotion on your voice. BUT it doesn't flow together and make it easy to follow
lyrics could be a little better...
overall this was decent, not great...but you got potential man..i could see you advancing with alot more practice
6/10 ( woulda been rated lower if I included quality in this...upp ya microphone game)
peace!
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Re: ' Devil On My Bed '
by i4ill » Jan 20th, '10, 08:54
thanx for the feed bro...
bump...
bump...
I'm the letters that alphabet never heard about, the words that the lines couldn't manage to gather, the lines that the verses failed to comprehend, the verses that no song would dare to embrace, the song that no pen would ever write down.
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Re: ' Devil On My Bed '
by i4ill » Jan 21st, '10, 06:54
you suck guys!
lol I guess I better leave this forum for good...even those who I feeded didn't return the feed. which is childesh and gay, maybe cuz I must post 546754675 posts to gain social love lol...thanx Ironic for the feed
peace everyone...
lol I guess I better leave this forum for good...even those who I feeded didn't return the feed. which is childesh and gay, maybe cuz I must post 546754675 posts to gain social love lol...thanx Ironic for the feed
peace everyone...
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Re: ' Devil On My Bed '
by Nick. Y » Jan 22nd, '10, 16:10
you delivery and flow ain't good enough for me..sorry.. and I think the chorus is fucked up too 'cause it sounds too different from the rest of the song
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Re: ' Devil On My Bed '
by Tash8 » Jan 22nd, '10, 18:41
you have too much reverb on you're vocals... i like the hook kinda, i like the singing, hate the second part.. lyrics are cool, accent makes it hard to enjoy it.. flow isn't THAT bad..you're flowing, i just don't think you're flowing to the beat..
hope that helps you bro.
hope that helps you bro.
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Re: ' Devil On My Bed '
by Slice » Jan 22nd, '10, 18:54
the hook keeps in my mind 
i like the lyrics, there are some good rhymes. i didn't like the flow but it was okay
i like the lyrics, there are some good rhymes. i didn't like the flow but it was okay- Slice
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