mystical - trying a diff style :P

by **xariuss** » Feb 5th, '10, 10:40

Trying a different style from my previous audio i posted thanks to some feedback.

Download Link Bellow:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/72203280e05c6abf/

I hope this is a little easier, it was just a quick 10minute written rap but trying a faster more unique flow i suppose.

thanks in advance! (def waiting for tash8 to leave a comment lol)

by **B.A.D.** » Feb 5th, '10, 11:48

I like the beat man

you are flowing good but completely out of the beat... like you did not wrote it to the beat.
you need to flow in it, not over it.

I like the rhymes, this one sounds less eminem-ish... quality is a bit fucked up but that can be easily fixed.

just work on the flow which is the most important first... then u can build up the lyrics around it.

:y:

by **xariuss** » Feb 5th, '10, 13:14

Thanks for the advice, i'll work on it

by **Tash8** » Feb 5th, '10, 16:58

ok man listening

yeah flow is a bit out of the beat.. the reason is you're focusing too much on you're rhyming scheme and not too much on if the rhyme scheme fits the beat or not.. that's easily fixed you just need to cut some words imo

but definitely less eminem... i dont hear many similarities anymore..lyrics are decent, ur rhymes are great but sometimes u sacrifice ur rhymes for other things (like flow, meaning, etc) now that can fine if ur amazing at flow but if ur new at flow i'd suggest focusing on that first. Lyrics aren't a break or make type variable, as opposed to a flow, which can make or a break a track..

good job man, keep it up i can already see improvements.

by **xariuss** » Feb 6th, '10, 00:15

Thanks for the feedback bro

For my next short verse ill work on flow more.

by **Kosovic** » Feb 7th, '10, 02:10

Thought you were hidden somewhere, havent seen you around in 4 years.

by **xariuss** » Feb 7th, '10, 20:47

Yeah i've been at uni and haven't really written any songs in ages, still trying to find my flow lol.

Still alive and kicking xD

by **Kosovic** » Feb 9th, '10, 00:34

I say.....got the time to upgrade some equip?

by **xariuss** » Feb 10th, '10, 14:53

Rightio then.

by **Kosovic** » Feb 10th, '10, 20:48

Bet ur pardon?

by **xariuss** » Feb 11th, '10, 01:11

I'll get a better mic once I pay for my new semester textbooks ($430). So probs another 3-4 weeks before I can afford it

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