BANDIT ~ BEAT IT UP!! (drop links) PLZ FEEDBACK

[j3andit]

sup guys, thanks for positive feedback from my first recording! I appreciate it.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/771406897db50d0f/

http://limelinx.com/files/0859b3dc77fe1 ... 8f1883cc5e

anyways...I was workin on a track with one of my friends right now..
appreciate any feedback and comments! and I will return the favor I promise!!

1st) Nick da Knife
2nd) Bandit (me)
3rd) ------

MY VOCALS (j3andit)

Imma beat it up, till you start seein stuff
cuz bein tough with me will leave you leakin on the street
and i'm just speakin to my region when I preach it
so misogynistic (massage on his dick) when I...
stick the dip of my dick on her lip
and I don't give a shit about a bitch and never did,
titty fuck her ribs till she gets pissed, then I go limp
eat a bizkit, sittin while her hips jigglin
then I see a zit on her clit and I start trippin at once
cuz if i had hit in mattress unlit I'd end up pissin out puss
I muster(d) a condiment for a bitch with pimples
on her clitoris, it's hit or miss when I compliment
a chick on my dick, you get burned with the tactics
from a bandit with a white 'ol jacket and I'm sandwiched
in between 94 brackets and I'll leave you with more panic
than the Lost flight's oceanic (JACK)
I'm so savage on the beat I cause havoc
i was talkin bout a bitch, but I planted a bomb on the track
better salvage it....

this is quite early just wondering what kinda feedback it would get so far before we lace the third verse!

[j3andit]

thanks alot for the feedback bro!! I really appreciate the listen..

please can I get some moreeeee

[Mr. Chambers]

fuck the other guy too lazy


your verse was bittersweet.....the switch from the slower paced flow was a very nice touch......but the dubs were off on it...and throughout the rest of the verse you were kinda off beat....lyrics were ok...nothing special or amazing...but did the job...delivery was decent......not jaw droppnig tho

overall...really just an average song @ best....keep your head up tho