M.pyre new song

[M-Pyre]

song: "why are you running"
production: by me
description: hiphop lyrics straight to the bone (imo)

product is unfinished. has yet to be mixed and mastered.

song:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/795488340d5a0d66/

feedback is greatly appreciated and will be returned!

[Terry_M]

I really liked the beat, the flow and the lyrics. I had a bit of trouble understanding the hook, but the flow was still on point on it.

[M-Pyre]

why are you running son? didn't mean to be cumbersome/
is it because I'm done running from all you punks with the fronts in abundance/

thnks man. appreciate it!

[Xray]

Quality is very good. Both the beat and vocals are mixed very good. Lyrics were cool, but you don't have good pronunciation to pull the Slim Shady rhyme-scheme. Flow was good throughout, delivery could of used a little turning up. I don't like your lyrics, I think you are trying too hard to be lyrical. I liked the beat it was good. Hook was annoying.

[M-Pyre]

Quality is very good. Both the beat and vocals are mixed very good. Lyrics were cool, but you don't have good pronunciation to pull the Slim Shady rhyme-scheme. Flow was good throughout, delivery could of used a little turning up. I don't like your lyrics, I think you are trying too hard to be lyrical. I liked the beat it was good. Hook was annoying.

what do you mean by that? as in, I could pronunciate a sentence right but only as long as there arent no internal rhymes?

and, you think the lyrics are cool but you don't like em? paradox anyone .. nahh, kidding, I think I know what you mean.

anyways, thnks for the feed man. I appreciate it!

[M-Pyre]

anyone?

[mcZu]

I agree with Xray on the pronunciation. start off good at every verse, and then you fade away, if you know what I mean. The flow sounds good, though. I would work on my pronunciation if I were you. Or change up my rhyme scheme and go easy on the internal rhymes...

Something that helps is memorizing your lyrics and rapping them up tempo a couple of times before recording (credit goes to Tash for that piece of advice).

[M-Pyre]

I agree with Xray on the pronunciation. start off good at every verse, and then you fade away, if you know what I mean. The flow sounds good, though. I would work on my pronunciation if I were you. Or change up my rhyme scheme and go easy on the internal rhymes...

Something that helps is memorizing your lyrics and rapping them up tempo a couple of times before recording (credit goes to Tash for that piece of advice).

I see, well, I do know the lyrics by heart so I know that aint the case. hmm, I'll see what I can do. btw, words are just words, it doesn't matter if they rhyme or not, my pronunciation should be exactly the same. muliies or no multies. but just in case could you give me a few examples of where I went wrong?

anyways, thnks for the feedback I really appreciate it!

[M-Pyre]

I think what they're trying to say is: You slur too much to be able to rap fast and you sound like a completely generic McMaybe knock off. I'm just calling it how I see it.

well, I've never heard him spit so I wouldn't know. I'm just being me.

You’ll always sound like somebody else, till somebody else sounds like you

- tonedeff

that sluring must have happened 2 times or so. it surely won't stop me from wanting to rap fast. I mean, if you're able to understand me then all is good. tho it doesn't mean I wont try to perfect my pronunciation.

thanks for the feedback.. it was, constructive.

[Solace]

Really enjoyed this too.

[M-Pyre]

Really enjoyed this too.

hehe, glad you did