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Explicit - Ya Hear Me

Postby Tranquil » Dec 19th, '10, 12:49

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This is recorded over T.I's Ya Hear Me beat, so you can kinda say its a remix i guess :laughing: Any feedback would be appreciated, and if you want me to return the feed, just ask ;)

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Re: Explicit - Ya Hear Me *1st Single*

Postby JBM » Dec 19th, '10, 14:18

Tracks pretty good. Delivery and flow on verses was nice. I liked a couple of the lines. The chorus was ok, nothing great though.

Only one main problem, Location: Sydney, Australia

It's a kiwi thing. :whistle:
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Re: Explicit - Ya Hear Me *1st Single*

Postby Tranquil » Dec 19th, '10, 14:26

JBM wrote:Tracks pretty good. Delivery and flow on verses was nice. I liked a couple of the lines. The chorus was ok, nothing great though.

Only one main problem, Location: Sydney, Australia

It's a kiwi thing. :whistle:

thanks for the feed man, and hahaha nah mate..... It's an aussie thing. :whistle:
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Re: Explicit - Ya Hear Me *1st Single*

Postby Le Tunisien » Dec 20th, '10, 08:55

flow and delivery were okay,this is an okay song nothin great though, i thought the '"you hear me " thing was annoying,chorus was not bad... :coffee:
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Re: Explicit - Ya Hear Me *1st Single*

Postby Tranquil » Dec 20th, '10, 09:20

le tunisien wrote:flow and delivery were okay,this is an okay song nothin great though, i thought the '"you hear me " thing was annoying,chorus was not bad... :coffee:

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Re: Explicit - Ya Hear Me *1st Single*

Postby Mr. Chambers » Dec 20th, '10, 20:04

not a fan of the beat

delivery sounds kind of tense, but you have potential. you seem like your hiding you accent and trying to sound american. just being honest.

flow was shakey. sometimes it missed the snare, sometimes it went past. you stretched syllables and sped them up. learn to just smooth it out, but once again i see potential.

lyrics were ok, nothing amazing tho.

the chorus needs to be more standout ish. try adding layers or more echo or something becuz it sounded just like the verse.
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Re: Explicit - Ya Hear Me *1st Single*

Postby Tranquil » Dec 22nd, '10, 08:43

Mr. Chambers wrote:not a fan of the beat

delivery sounds kind of tense, but you have potential. you seem like your hiding you accent and trying to sound american. just being honest.

flow was shakey. sometimes it missed the snare, sometimes it went past. you stretched syllables and sped them up. learn to just smooth it out, but once again i see potential.

lyrics were ok, nothing amazing tho.

the chorus needs to be more standout ish. try adding layers or more echo or something becuz it sounded just like the verse.

thanks man :smoking: and thats just how i sound, i dont try to hide my accent and sound american, i just dont have a strong aussie accent like most people ;)
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