Redzek - Get A Life [DISS] (Personal BEEF)

[Le Tunisien]

(feedbackk thing:http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=103874&p=1453107#p1453107

i havent dissed anybody for a long ass time,but some people just push u to beef,this one is a beef in real life

http://www.zshare.net/audio/84361997da2bb904/

yeah its redzek
man i need to get this shit off my chest before i fuckin explode or somethin
i never started this shit ,but now i'll finish it
you fuckin punk

this is the story about a motherfucker talkin shit
u'll be so sorry if i saw you somewhere walkin bitch
you dont want it with me,cuz u know im liftin
you ten feets off the ground,now come and get me
your the new definition of talk but no walk
i'mma lay down the chalk,all you do is stalk
so homie keep talkin,soundin like a hulk
but you are not incredible,ull never be a hetero
you'r tryna get my level but u'll forever fall
you ugly stupid little faggot,be happy that i reply to you
not even a hairdresser'd ever motherfuckin die for you
you tellin me to come to fuck me up? you fuckin punk
now are you drunk?but as you want
if life was an ocean then your ship would of sunk
and you cant even swim,so why you fight?u'll never win
ever since today ill pray god forgive me for my sin
its not a game, i dont play motherfucker

you insult me..but you gon see
how its gona be becuz homie you dont know me
you talk shit on my back
not on my face but in your breath,fuckin fag

i'm a man,and u'r not
youu'r only talkin shit and shit is everything u got
i'd never want to fight
you'r a pussy for doin that ,go and get a life


god forgive me for my sin cuz im givin you a twin
i mean im breakin you to half,im makin this for my behalf
you dead walkin man,keep barkin and you know planes dont stop
so imma keep flying to the top,as my name gon pop,i aint ever gon drop
so what? i never talked about ur mother so go and fuck yours
you'r a loser good at nothin you would only rock whores
for your money but you got nothin,man u'r broke as fuck
so you hope for luck but u'r stuck,tryna rap but u suck
and infact u'r a slut,even the blind could see the girl in you
but do as you prefer to you,i said that i will murder who
ever keeps talkin shit on my back everytime
u'r a pussy for doin that,and you must have lost your mind
cuz u just v crossed the line,this is not just a rhyme
its a war,u already lost,... resign motherfucker

you insult me..but you gon see
how its gona be becuz homie you dont know me
you talk shit on my back
not on my face but in your breath,fuckin fag

i'm a man,and u' r not
youu'r only talkin shit and shit is everything u got
i'd never want to fight
you'r a pussy for doin that ,go and get a life

i'd kill you in sight,and you dont realise
that u'r an ugly fuck who'd never ever get a wife
cuz u'r a homo and we all know,
so dont you ever fuck with me,again get a life

i would never even reply to you,but all the shit you tried to do
finally got to work,i would ignore you at first but then you jerk just lied to
the person you know i love more than everything in the world
and no shes not only a girl,shes more than everything,in words
i'd say..i dunno exactly which word i would chose
but all i know is that no word is enough.. and u'r confused
get the fuck outta my life and just leave us the fuck alone
you got nothin better to do ..just because u'r stuck at home?
man..i feel bad for you ,this shit is sad to do,i'll leave you mad and bruised
when you act hard,you just get smacked hard
but seriously who the fuck you think you are?

you insult me..but you gon see
how its gona be becuz homie you dont know me
you talk shit on my back
not on my face but in your breath,fuckin fag

i'm a man,and u'r not
youu'r only talkin shit and shit is everything u got
i'd never want to fight
you'r a pussy for doin that ,go and get a life


yeah you stupid fuck,you need to get a life for real man
and keep my name outta your mouth you fuckin faggot
cuz i dont even know who the fuck you are
and i dont even wanna know who the fuck you are
oh yeah..just one thing...stop actin so hard
when you'r nothin but a fuckin pussy

[Trimss]

Chorus was inspired by Dont approach me, first lines (intro) were inspired by the sauce

now this line is stupid i think,

but you are not incredible,ull never be a hetero


Overall, you had a good flow and i can understand the accent, english isn't my first language neither.

[Le Tunisien]

Chorus was inspired by Dont approach me, first lines (intro) were inspired by the sauce

now this line is stupid i think,

but you are not incredible,ull never be a hetero


Overall, you had a good flow and i can understand the accent, english isn't my first language neither.

ermmm as for the chorus i dont see how its inspired of dont approach me..i didnt even think of that song hmm just sayin "you insult me" means its inspired of it ,and for the intro
yes the i never started it but ill finish it thing i loved it enough to put it imo

hmm for the line of incredible, its like this : sounding like a *hulk but yo u are not *incredible...
and then its continues "ull never a hetero..." u see

and thanks for the rest of what u said ,thanks for takin time and hearing

you gotta post a link of feedback.

but yo the flow was decent, i just had a hard time understanding some of it
good work though

oh my bad ill post it in a minute, and thanks man glad u heard it and liked it

[Drama Setter]

awesome

[Le Tunisien]

awesome

thanks homie thanks for takin time to hear my song

[B.A.D.]

hahaha damn!!!
nice

dude, you are getting close to me with your hooks ... nah, for real, great hook man.
as well as the bridge at last, that was amazing. also I notice the quality improved 0.1% thats good hahaha, just keep improving with everytrack

also, you need to watch how you pronounce some words, beacuse sometimes its impossible to understang bcuz you sound like you are chewing something... "shimit shimit shimit blah!"
be carefull with every word. and take the volume of the layovers a little bit down.

I love the flow, excelent as well as the technique of wiritng you demonstrated on this piece. however, as a diss, its str8 out wack. if you really want to hurt someone when dissing you gotta go stronger than that man. I couldn't find a single punch that stands out. everything is just random punches.

specially when you are making a diss against someone that most of the listeners dont know, you need to talk more about that persons persona on the track, introduce him. then take him down. dont just throw punches like "your a fag"... "act hard, smacked hard".... you have to get more personal than that. do your homework, research that nikka.

like I said, the technique you demonstrated is amazing, the hook is excelent, the flow is greatness, lyrics are allright. you need to work on the English Grammar too.

[Le Tunisien]

hahaha damn!!!
nice

dude, you are getting close to me with your hooks ... nah, for real, great hook man.
as well as the bridge at last, that was amazing. also I notice the quality improved 0.1% thats good hahaha, just keep improving with everytrack

also, you need to watch how you pronounce some words, beacuse sometimes its impossible to understang bcuz you sound like you are chewing something... "shimit shimit shimit blah!"
be carefull with every word. and take the volume of the layovers a little bit down.

I love the flow, excelent as well as the technique of wiritng you demonstrated on this piece. however, as a diss, its str8 out wack. if you really want to hurt someone when dissing you gotta go stronger than that man. I couldn't find a single punch that stands out. everything is just random punches.

specially when you are making a diss against someone that most of the listeners dont know, you need to talk more about that persons persona on the track, introduce him. then take him down. dont just throw punches like "your a fag"... "act hard, smacked hard".... you have to get more personal than that. do your homework, research that nikka.

like I said, the technique you demonstrated is amazing, the hook is excelent, the flow is greatness, lyrics are allright. you need to work on the English Grammar too.

props for this in depth feed man,it helps me improving alot
nah i woudlnt get close to u with hooks,urs are just great but really glad that u liked it,and yeah quality like improved a bit cuz of the new mic of headset and cuz im mixing like u told me to,yeah i know sometimes i dont concentrate on how im sayin words i will concentrate on every word next time oh im happy that find my flow excellent =o i kept improving it from track to track till i got to this now i know but i didnt want to hurt him with punches cuz its just to warn him to not fuck with him its more like scaring him that hurting me,hes already butthurt but u'r right..but really the personals u thought are random are really about him hes a loser who got no life and tried to rap and did a song copied the lyrics of superman from eminem and the lyrics of the real slim shady on the chorus and edited and just wack as fuckf and he kept talkin shit on my back,i dont even really know all i know that hes the ex of my gf, fucki him

but really, thanks alot for this in depth feed , appreciated alot homie