Vettori,Sincere-Sage & Nefarious- Distractions

[Vettori]

http://hulkshare.com/7hs4b1is1b0f

We wrote and recorded this lastnight. Finally mixed it.
This is the first song with all four of us on it, and it's differant from what we normally do. Let us know what you think.

First verse + Chorus- Vettori

Second Verse- Sincere

Third Verse- Sage

Fourth Verse- Nefarious

-Concept is Distractions

beat produced by: Anno domini
Lyrics-

Chorus-

Hey you there, Why you gettin distracted
Try to get past
How do you do that without
Regrettin your actions

Vettori

Im so sick of distractions
only for a moment Only If you imagine,
I stampede upon a beat and if im Givin the challenge
Can't be greedy but i need to Crush the Beat
I must unleash the rush,Each of us have it
i gotta walk home when the tire on my bike is flat
i think alot though it's the fire that Ignited this track
That and the fact that i like to just rap
Phone rings........ Mic just goes flat
Just before i figure what to put right in the gaps
a sexy girl Struts in with the nicest of ass
I drop a cheesy punchline "you got a Licence for that"
Im doin this instead of writing a rap
Take a trip to the Core of downtown Put my bike on the rack
bus to toronto Airport and take a flight off the map
I try to do more in one Day then one Does in a year
the moment i start to stray, all of a sudden I hear

Sincere

So im trying to write this track, concentrate and relax.
But people keep on screaming bullshit in the back!
Cant fuckin hear myself think thats some distracting shit.
Thats why i start a song and only finish half of it.
I get so fuckin mad i start to laugh at it.
Hey cory! wannna chill dont ask me this!
Im trying to do my homework you fuckin nasty bitch.
But i like the way you act thats some classy shit.
Maybe you should come back ill let you gaf my dick.
Fuck, now i fuckin missed class again.
Now ill never make the cash that i have to get.
Cuz i snuck off somewhere with the bachelorette.
I can tell you right now this aint my last regret
Went to work fucked up on a acid trip.
Distracted fuck that, thats the last of that shit.
Now i lost my job and cant support my passion!

Sage

Ive been working on the same track for half a year.
Im distracted here, fuck!, i dont have to hear.
About your last career, if you talk to me again then imma smash a mirror.
But i would rather sit back and just crack a beer.
Its a fact, i will never know what happens next.
Everytime im happy, theyre mad depressed.
Its got me snappy, this shit has me stressed.
And i dont like it when theyre fuckin with my happiness.
For you to shut the fuck up its my last request.
Letting you distract me is my last regret.
Gettin past the rest, fuck you, your bad attempt, to get me mad insted.
Your lookin half possessed, everything youve told me shows your passionless.
This whole worlds so fucked i cant fathom it.
Its got everybody doing what they have to.
Have you ever met a person who would ask you this!

Nefarious

I really dont have time, hurry say what your askin.
Im gettin this track done, no further distractin.
Im taking some action, and im making it happen.
Ill do just about anything i can think or imagine.
Im addicted to taking your full attention away.
Ill interrupt you at the second you attempted to say.
What you were thinking, im the only thing that's left in your way.
I know this isnt what you wanted or expected today.
Im a debt high price you neglected to pay.
And ive infected your brain, so you dont get to be sane.
I'll never finish if im all about the stress and the pain.
Unless i take control of all of this aggresion and aim.
Ill do the best that i can, and give it all that i have.
Ill live with what i was given, insted of fall when im mad.
Ive always liked to be alone insted of wondering who's there.
The way that you stare shows you actually do care.


Hope you enjoy

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[classthe_king]

It was a pretty good song but it deffinitely got boring. All four of you used the same rhyme schemes and flow without really switching up the subject matter. I felt like I heard the same verse four times in a row.

[DƎRDYPK]

I'm diging it
I really like how this was mixed
sounds real good
all verses were delivered pretty well but my favorites are the 1st 2
they really opened the track nice

[VenomBlackViper]

This was nice man 1st and third verses were my favorite, although your voices do sound pretty simillar.

[Tash8]

wow Vet, it's so obvious you taught all these guys how to write cause every single verse had exact same rhyme scheme hahaha and flow and everything..Anyways chorus was ok it grew on me and ur verse was tight and i liked nef's verse..the other two guys were good too. but they were all too similar.

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

i think the same rhyme scheme shows a good song arrangement...
i think the problem is the hook...for what it is its good..but i would do Verse - Verse - Hook - Verse - Verse - Hook - Hook..just a thought...
i liked Sincere verse the best.....from mixing and delivery it stood out..
i have the feeling your verse had too much highs EQ'd ( if u say it like that)....sage was just poorly done to me....and Nef was a nice filler to me..no hate i know what Nef is capable to do but this one..JUST decent lol..so yeah Sincere stood out to me...
as said...flow,rhyme scheme were solid as fuck...

[B.A.D.]

hey man, I know you always leave feed to everybody, but still can u post a link to a recent one, otherwise I'll have to lock it, Like i told bar on his thread, I have to be equal with everyone man

About the song:

The beat sounds extremely familiar, Hmm... oh yeah Tom chamber's.. why do you hate me, dope.

Verse 1 vettori - your verse is way too loud man and too many effects going on, kinda distracting. I like the way you flow a lot, and your particular effects on your voice, gives you a lot of uniqueness. tho I've seen you write waaaaaqyyy better than this. your hook is ok. not my favourite.
either way great verse man. Very vivid, easy to connect, is just the effects n volume, and you kinda rush so it takes some of it away.

Verse 2 Sincere - again, greatness, look at that fucking verse. you really should post more around here, I really look forward for to hear more from you. also your delivery is really good, flow, all that is nice. my favourite thing is the style you bring into the song, a little more hood, realer. I dont know how to explain it, but its more hip hop say.

Verse 3 Sage - that was really good aswell, strangely the mirror smashed here works better than vettoris effects. your stlye is also real real cool. the only thing I didnt like was the flow, very asthmatic , nothing that I could really love. But I like your voice and the way you deliver

Verse 4 - I dont want to sound hating but this really really sounds eminem wannabe, which is worst than eminemish. and absolutely nothing stands out. I mean it well written, well flowed, but theres nothing going on. I liked your multi's tho.

Overall: I think this is by far the worst track any of you have made (of what I've heard from all of you when vettori shows us). like class said, I felt like Its the same verse 3 times (Sincere's was amazing, and different, thats why it stands out). and also except sincere you all sound the same. When doing this tracks u need to get 4 different stlyes to feed the track a bit from everyone, beacuse you dont even complement eachother.

other than that, it is something I will listen to often beacuse its comfortable, catchy and there's a lot going on. the big problem was organization probably. so really work on those aspects when getting on a song together, make everybody aport something different.

[Vettori]

thank you for the in depth feedback everyone...

yea i had a feeling my vocals where loud...but i got used to it like that haha..ill try bump it down a notch or so. We were all in the room together when we wrote this so thats why our concept is so on point with eachother...we wer'e running off eachothers energy haha

well i definatly thought this song would have gotten better reveiws...but it shows me...My ear isn't the only one to please. I'll post a link to feedback in a moment..i actually just forgot this time.

Thank you all again for comming through,

Iv'e had and still have alot of projects im working on atm.
So i dont have as much time to do much... I'll fefinatly keep poppin by to see what everyones been up to and relelasing... Just not every day

I love it though..I'll finally have something to show for all this at the end..
most of you with mixtapes/albums already know that feeling.

[B.A.D.]

oh you actually working on a tape finally?

[Vettori]

Maybe iv'e said too much

haha

[Nefarious]

Thanks everyone, and sorry i havent had time to comment on others, i just remade my TR and the day after my computer broke.

Aswell as alot of you, i realized the 4 of us sounded kind of the same, but most of that was just based on pure luck, we all knew the concept and wrote from what we knew and we ended up saying some things that the other person had said without knowing, which i dont think was a very bad thing but i guess thats because i can tell the differnce between our voices and some other people cant, i thought my verse on this didnt bring as much energy as everyone elses did, but like someone else said, it was a good filler i guess, i thought so aswell, about me having a similarity to eminem, well i guess me and eminem think alot alike, because in no way do i ever try to copy eminem, but i still take it as a compliment, and can possibly see where your comming from, i do listen to alot of eminem so his flow may rub off on me at times, but my lyrics are always written from the heart

Thanks again for the love everyone.

[Maybe]

Well, I loved the song. Honestly, it was great and is added to the iPod folder with the rest of your songs that I enjoy. My only complaint, it wasn't up to par with some other of your most recent work. It felt like a throwaway song to me, but what do I know? It was good, end of story. Flow seemed especially good, because I felt the rhyme schemes switch up occasionally.

[Vettori]

Thank you ...yea i feel it's for certain people...But i cant keep making the same song over and over...so i'm trying to switch it up a bit..
I'm comfortable wth it, But it certainly does have less meaning them some of my other songs...
At the same time it was a very relevant topic i think...

Thank you all for checking this.

[Vettori]

thank you