Spyder - Heavyweight Hitter

[Spyder]

volume/mixing is bad but fuck it

track
http://hulkshare.com/tdahpse1is2r

Y’all tryin to fillet the game I try to eat it raw
Hellen Keller punches y’all aint never seen before
Droppin audio you havent heard me speak at all
Just seen me posses letters like a fuckin ouija board
to much flossin your gums start bleedin brah
bite worse than my bark and I aint even teething dog.
Bunch of phonies in rap boastin action and violence
Underground lyrics hardcore with platinum alliance
So in the lab my chemistry massive with my hits
So my tracks universal, im radio-active… its science
Im out of this earth how am I not lost yet
With aliens spaceships making me profit.
I predicted my place in the game like nostradamus
Mainstream appeal brain underground like an ostrich.
So its easy to see why I be takin the charts
Plug the mic cord in my chest to hear it straight from the heart
Viagra style I come amazingly hard
Spit the last verse first, backwards, your done straight from the start.
Your style Shady and you hit Rock Bottom it seems
But you a bottom bunk rapper, aint even on top in ya dreams
You aint talkin like me see, im to outspoken
Its like my fuckin tongue leaves all your mouths housebroken.
You now down chokin, dead and aint gettin up
Stay off my track, my train of thought will Eddie Griffin ya
Man of the hour, broke the hour glass to keep my reign alive
Any MRI picture still aint get my frame of mind
My style aint a mystery so go back to the bible
Y’all cyclops, have to double take to see the way that I do.
My rage primal, I keep comin like lyrics you jacked off
All your words mine first, all you speakin is backwash.
Claim you hard with a temper heated… is that all?
I just see you as a tempur pedic… yes that soft
Voice garbage, trash talk, you just shit at best
Hit you like 1 2 so you die from my second hand like cigarettes
Flow November 11th… hit the vets,
With a throat like paris hilton, you know I spit the best.
Cant leave quite yet aint done what I need to do
Need to go Mike Vallely and beat ya crew.
Spit the heat maybe drop some Ether too,
Call me out 3 times I start some shit like Beetle Juice.
My bullets costly, you cant afford the gun
I just play with these pussies, I got bored of tongue.
My lyrics aggravate like im some sort of scum
So they try to clean my dirty mouth like orbit gum.
Rappers only wanna get rich, fat pocket get lipo fast
But you got eyes on my money, call it geico cash
Ill light yo ass, too many bars for a sequel
Im Dr. Pepper my flavor cannot be equaled.
So people watch the flame as I lift the lighter
Youll get singed with fire if you spit with Spyder
Think its fun and games when you a writer
Stand up I lock this comedian down, Richard Pryor.
Your shits expired, false hope if you think its tight
When im the one who raise hands like midnight,
So get it right, you fucked up if you think this your setting
Talk big then cower away, you were just pretending
Claiming you king everyone else representing
But you only talk straight when you back track, Desiree Jennings.
You write half assed, so tell me what you dare to do
If I was half assed, my shit still one sided compared to you
Im advanced and you got no chance at this dance do you?
Ill put you in Jeopardy askin questions you know the answers to.
So get you ass and hide, my punches succumb to them
Similar to an oyster, everything on my tongues a gem
Here I come again, with the last of lines ina masters prime
Have you screamin oh god like a pastors cry,
Lemme scale you up like raptor hide, aint mad but I…
Well you know how I get when I down a fifth like Jackson Five!

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[B.A.D.]

I listened to this, I like the beat. Remember that song you sent me a while back? Wippin Off The Cobwebs, the flow u used in that was more controlled than this. maybe you should try switchin back a bit for now, I dig that other one

this song, well... you do pretti much what every new rapper wants to do, Impress with lyrics instead of focusing on hip hop istelf, which is the flow, the style, the smoothness of a voice in the beat. gotta feel it man, u know what I mean??... feel the flow through you.

now, the lyrics I did loved them. "Plug the mic cord in my chest to hear it straight from the heart"

good job none-the-less

[Spyder]

ya im not too worried about lyrics but maybe im over doin em for new to audio,
and yeah i member that track, flow was horrible i listened to that tonight again actualy

beat was fuckin sick, and propz on hook

but thanks for feed bro

[Spyder]

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[Block]

That beat sounds like the 'pain & torture' beat by jadakiss

Ax already explained basically everything. all I can say is that this shit takes time. Keep working@ it, man.

[ThomasAguanis]

You had some solid lines, but as others said, your flow needs work. After a while, writing to a beat with your style will work, but it'll take some hard work, you'll be able to do it though. This beat is made for a punchline track, so maybe you can revisit it once you're more comfortable with audio. Also, I would cut the adlibs. I think you overdid them. Keep doing your thing and improvements in all catagories should come naturally.

[Instant Legend]

you still sound a little rough around the edges, but you've got some dope lines in here, and you picked a dope beat

i actually think with a lot of techical mixing/editing experience you'll be doin really well

keep it growin homie!

return the favor please (if you've already checked it out, listen again and give it some time to really grow on ya!)

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[Spyder]

thanks for all the feed

and Block its Snowgoons the curse, more known as Joe Budden Dumb Out

jada prob used it too idk


i will try to feed your track soon bro