Trimss & Demaz freestyle

[Trimss]

So I tried something, the mixing is bad but I had a good idea and i really wanted to try it. I asked Demaz to send me a verse, he did it and I made this.. He didn't know what I was doing. I had to cut his verse to try some type of back'n'forth shit (it's not welcome 2 hell though lmao) but the idea was kinda cool. This is clearly not our best though, we were messing around..

I had fun doing this though so it's all cool. I re-recorded verses so it's really a mess.. But hey, it was for the fun just like I said.

http://hulkshare.com/dguvfo4532e7

Lyrics:

You gonna be pledging the allegeance,
wanna be testing my intelligence,
nobody heard me when i fell in silence
When I say i'm doing well i'm lying
Cuz so much things were happening
like i just wanna grab a knife and be stabbing,
take the ammos i'm stacking and just kill everyone
who's starin'at my fucking eyes,
I'm sick of people who stigmatize,
i'm sick of lies so when i see you my dick may rise,
Hood acting but i still stay white, still say right
but people just think i'm a wannabe tupac,
Loving Waka flocka flames people wanna be too wack,
too many fag waiting to get fucked with the pants they sag
Too many bitches lay on my bed, too many things stay on my head
too many fucking tears I shead, Too many fucking fears I had


Demaz


Here we go another searing flow
demaz is on his collab game I'm nearly home
trimss is coming tr is coming big ax-d is coming
yo man we are afraid of nothing
bro what food will work to get energy tonight
dunno man but mabye veges might
getting rosey cheaks from snorting ready pipes
full of lds not laced I hope tho the guy seemed friendly right
damn there goes 8 bars already
I'm sueing cabory for making my mum put on weight
looks good on paper mate I'll type more raps fuck a pen
anyway enoguh with the vauge metophors then
running away with several whores and men
oh wait I better call my friend
don't you know demaz doesn't give a fuck
this verse just made no sense so kiss my butt


Demaz:looks good on paper mate I'll type more raps fuck a pen

Trimss:Grab some papermint and kiss fags, shut up man

Demaz: anyway enoguh with the vauge metophors then

Trimss:Go away and laugh.. man.. little bored then

Demaz:running away with several whores and men

Trimss: there's no way other than throwin you pen

Demaz : oh wait I better call my friend

Trimss: Yeah it's me, back again

Demaz: don't you know demaz doesn't give a fuck
this verse just made no sense so kiss my butt

Trimss: Believe my butt when I see you slut,
piss me not, piss my nut, diss my gut
see me hot? being nut on this cut

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=126700

[mdemaz]

Wow, that was nicely done lol...

I might put the song on the bonus disc of my new album...

[Eedee]

I know you're from Belgium Trimss, so I'll cut you some slack, but you really need to deliver more clearly. You rush so many words it's like a clusterfuck of syllables and sounds I have a hard time hearing what you're saying. But the rhymes were nice, so that's a plus.

Mat, you sure do love those pauses in your flow haha. The back and forth was very choppy, going from a good sounding mastering to a horrible vocal mix, it was really bad, but the idea was nice, just executed very poorly.

Maybe just produce it a little better, and it'll more enjoyable, but for now, I just can't enjoy it. That's not an insult at you guys, just some constructive criticism. So take this feedback and everyone else's (if they do feed this track) and work with it and you can only get better.

Feel free to feed me and mdemaz back on our track "Hard Time", thanks! viewtopic.php?f=38&t=127354

[mdemaz]

I'm gonna remove it from YouTube for now..Until my album is done..Then I can do more of this stuff for the bonus disc..
I think me and Trimss should go on a simpler beat and try it out, he's got a fast double-time flow and it was going to waste on this track..
I sorta feel bad for him.
Thanks for the feed E..

[Trimss]

This verse was recorded a long time ago, i just recorded the back and forth recently.

So I'm sure I can do better, and yeah without rushing it with a double time flow.

Demaz, hit me with a beat whenever you feel like it. I'll do better than this one.

[mdemaz]

Nah, that fast flow was sick, if people talk shit about it, then they are brain dead.
I understood each word.