Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated) :)

[Solace]

Did you ever rerecord this lol

[RainMan44]

Did you ever rerecord this lol

Nah, lol.

I've been going over it and practicing it, though.

I'm just going to wait until I get a job, and that's not going to be for another....3-4 months (that's when I graduate). But once I get that, I'll just record my whole album while I'm at it.

[Cobo Black]

I like the song, I think you need to consider this a "Ruff Draft" though, and go back and fix some parts. Some parts you fall off beat, and rush lyrics to fit and they still dont land on beat. I think your voice went perfect with this type of song, reminded me of Lupi Fiasco's "Daydreaming".

A lot of successfulness in rap is have a type of voice..its something your born with and can't be taught, its a voice that is distinctive and stands out and sounds good to the ears. I feel like you could have this for a certain lane of music...as long as you stay in that lane, it could work really well with you.

I suggest you keep working on your delivery, and not accepting (Screw ups) Be more of a perfectionist and don't rush on getting shit laid on track so you can share it...I know that is hard to do...but it will be worth it in the end. Keep up the good work man, again, it sounded quality, lyrics where there, content, voice..just gotta fix those blemishes.


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[Cobo Black]

Double posted..sorry....MODs can delete this one.

[RainMan44]

I like the song, I think you need to consider this a "Ruff Draft" though, and go back and fix some parts. Some parts you fall off beat, and rush lyrics to fit and they still dont land on beat. I think your voice went perfect with this type of song, reminded me of Lupi Fiasco's "Daydreaming".

A lot of successfulness in rap is have a type of voice..its something your born with and can't be taught, its a voice that is distinctive and stands out and sounds good to the ears. I feel like you could have this for a certain lane of music...as long as you stay in that lane, it could work really well with you.

I suggest you keep working on your delivery, and not accepting (Screw ups) Be more of a perfectionist and don't rush on getting shit laid on track so you can share it...I know that is hard to do...but it will be worth it in the end. Keep up the good work man, again, it sounded quality, lyrics where there, content, voice..just gotta fix those blemishes.


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Thanks for the feed bro, i'ma return the favor right quick

[Nefarious]

Nice choice of beat, i wrote on this a couple years ago myself, i never recorded it, but i wrote a verse and a chorus, and my friend wrote a verse, so there's no doubt i liked the beat lol, you did good on it to, some of the delivery was weird but atleast nobody will ever duplicate your sound, and since it was a older song the lyrics probably werent your best in the structure area, but they have alot more meaning insted, i notice my old songs have deeper topics and theyre awesome or they just suck lol, this would be one of those better songs, that your just happy to have.