Trimss - Curtain Call

[Trimss]

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I came after the curtain call,
I hear sounds but i'm searchin' yall
Should I go back to the church and shall
I go back to that place, back stuck against the wall
When the rap's laced I feel like fuck, again I fall
I'm stuck in that crap; let's face the pain and all,
no buck in my bag but the pace is changed, wow
Not a thug but a solitary act, some vain mauls
I shrug, it's a fact I faint in a mall
now whut, I slug in my bed cuz it's a rain fall
a pain call, a main bawls yeah my main brawl (I fucked up this part.)

So it's still short as fuck, it's just me practicing on staying on beat and mixing.. The quality on this doesn't seem really good though. :/ Sounds better on headphones. Had to rush it.. I don't really like my accent on it but if I ever re record it I could manage to make it better. However, didn't have much time.

Anyway, any feedback (harsh or not) is accepted. Also, for those who heard my previous work, can y'all tell me if it's a step forward or if it's not better? Thanks .

[Block]

This is one of the worst beats to use if you're just starting out attempting to keep a steady flow. You should use an obvious 4/4 beat with a steady clap and drum loop. Nothing fancy.

I'd also venture to say that this beat is a little too fast. Try something around 85-90 bpm. I'm guessing this is 94-98?

[iain08]

You seem to speed up at some parts which makes it sound a little awkward.

[Trimss]

This is one of the worst beats to use if you're just starting out attempting to keep a steady flow. You should use an obvious 4/4 beat with a steady clap and drum loop. Nothing fancy.

I'd also venture to say that this beat is a little too fast. Try something around 85-90 bpm. I'm guessing this is 94-98?

Yeah, I think you're right.. I noticed it was harder to flow on this beat, but I still have to know the difference between aa normal beat and a complicated one.

And yep, you're right, it's a little too fast. That's also why I had to speed up at moments which ..

You seem to speed up at some parts which makes it sound a little awkward.

sounded awkward.

I remember bumping your Martians vs Goblins freestyle, you didn't seem to have such a heavy accent like now, but it doesn't bother me though, good lyrics

It's noticeable in this track because I actually deleted my good acapellas first time, then I rushed it and this is how my accent looks when I rush it.

[B.A.D.]

I'd also venture to say that this beat is a little too fast. Try something around 85-90 bpm. I'm guessing this is 94-98?

probably faster... I agree its pretti weird.

about the song, I think your short verse was good but how much feedback can we give on that? its way too short.

critiques:
- hard to critique, the beat choice is weird and the song is too short, can't help much

compliements:
- that voice go hard, very gangsta haha

keep it up

[Spyder]

your accent is a little hard to understand, to me its sounds like your putting emphasis in weird places,
like your trying to catch the beat but cant. thats probably has to do with what block and ax said of pick a slower less complex beat.

really put longer things on here to give people something to feed, you probably wanted to know if you were heading in the right direction, but its hard to critique more than whats been said