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Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby gutawafang » Dec 25th, '11, 05:19

Woah that was pretty good. :y: :y: :y:
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby mdemaz » Dec 25th, '11, 05:31

Good shit man, you got everything nailed.

I can't really help you out here.
Just keep grinding bro.

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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby Ka0t1c » Dec 26th, '11, 17:31

everything was good, one negative, you have to shave, jk, i thought u rapped pretty well, maybe your voice is "soft" but the lyrics and timing are obviously there, pretty good but it's "dull". that's the only criticism i can really draw from this. keep rappin :y:
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby B.A.D. » Dec 27th, '11, 05:05

hahahaha, cold isn't it?

looks familiar, u in houston TX??

yeah man, i thought the song was pretti damn good, the vid was a bit boring, but i really liked the song bro, sick flow :y:
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby Spyder » Dec 29th, '11, 18:50

looks like you didnt have the emotion on your face and in the movements that i can hear in the vocals.
looks like you were just talking them and knew it would be ok cause audio would be dubbed.

smile, have fun with that shit, make it seem like your voice is going to be heard from the video man
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby mceddie » Dec 31st, '11, 02:11

everything was really good. the beat was fire. the flow was tight, good lyrics.
you just need to use more emotion, that's the only criticism i have.

8/10.



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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby Spyder » Jan 6th, '12, 04:40

didnt know you were on Ave :shifty:
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby 4NorthTL » Jan 6th, '12, 15:21

Best song I've heard on here so far as far as flow, lyrics, voice, etc.

The only thing I could say that could be better is the video, lol. You sound angry in alot of the song, really killing the mic, but the video has you seemingly standing there with your hands in your pockets waiting for the bus or something, tired and groggy mumbling to yourself, lol. You should remake the video and fuck up the camera like you fucked up the mic. Nice track.
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby Joel Venom » Jan 17th, '12, 06:04

thank you everyone for your feedback. i just came back to the site to see what ya'll thought and i appreciate the respect!
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Jan 21st, '12, 15:31

it was a great spit man, you were solid on the rapping, just need be a bit more loose in your performance and exaggerate things with a little more emotion to really let the line be portrayed in visual to the same extent as your voice is in audio.

good shit though man enjoyed it. :y:
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby Mr. Chambers » Jan 29th, '12, 17:39

this shit right here....

this shit right here......

this was overall sick...pretty much perfect...nice constant flow with some sick ass lyrics and a dope beat. you produce your own shit?

i d/l one of your mixtapes the other day i just haven't had time yet to listen but i'm looking forward to it. seems like you can make a on point tape. :y:
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby Joel Venom » Feb 2nd, '12, 23:23

thanks chambers, i'm definitely gonna post some more material!
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby randomghost » Feb 4th, '12, 21:17

the song is pretty sick..vocals mastered and mixed well..now regarding the video bro its kinda boring...cuz ur emotionless while performing...maybe u could show more emotions with ur face while spittin them words out as if u really feel it. and also shoot more scenes to make the video more interesting ..u feel me man....peace out
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Re: Joel Venom - Dot Dot Dot (Official Music Video)

Postby Vettori » Feb 14th, '12, 00:11

I think in the video you could have applied more energy, didn't seem much like a Music video.
Just like freestyle hanging out type. The quality was bearable, Written and recorded well.

when i have time i'll check some of your other songs.
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