Bar-Buryin

[Spyder]

LOF

Bar-Buryin

I hate rap, only do hip hop for hypocrisy
Showin these kids they just god damn wannabe’s
I ought to be shot by snipers crossin beams
Squads and fleet watching constantly under lock and key.
Boomin, discluding all of Mothman’s prophecies
Cause I’m disputing the view of the future he offered me.
I run this game, carry rappers till my muscles strain
But the globe on my shoulders don’t effect rugged Bane,
Morphine mask relax the growing stomach pains
So this act of eating battlers is just Hunger Games.
I’m so reckless, in the bible I got no mention
Once I found the gate to Heaven was built with Stone Henges,
Waking up in cold sweats in 20 below trenches
With bone shreds in old wreckage of body blown segments.
World under my control I left the globe breathless
Eyes closed spoke, spreadin Indrid Cold’s message
I’ll splinter your frame of mind, body chalked in a line
When that kalashnikov cough a coffins where you reside.
So lay off talkin bout you spray glocks quicker
While I raise arms like I was Adolph Hitler
I won’t hide it I’m the atheist you paint me as
In the art of war I ‘drew blood, soe’ call me the Patriot.

[Eedee]

Your vocal mixing seemed a bit too loud on the beat, to me at least.

Lyrics were good, nice multies and whatnot. Battle lyrics.

Your flow and breath control needs work, still. You speed up to cram in your punchlines and you run out of breath and it just sounds bad.

But you're getting better, just work on the mixing and the way you spit into the mic.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Good lyrics man, as said above the flow just seems off to me. If you record without using the beat I would suggest that you listen to the beat when you record, Also, I think that it was a cool beat but it sort of seemed hard to flow over in the first place if you know what I mean.
The mixing seemed fine to me though.
good job dude

[Spyder]

i listen when i record and honestly dont hear any bar sped up to meet the drum...
ya still fucking round with the voice, any better?

thanks for the feed you two