Eedee ft. WordSmith - "See The Light" [Week 4]

[Eedee]

LoF

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Week 4 of 8

[Verse 1: Eedee]
I took a good hard look at myself in the mirror now
And I see myself clearer now...
Here is how I arrived at my endpoint
Reality slap wasn't mine but my friend's choice.
I shed some tears, leaking what I held for years
Close to the heart, but when death was near
That's when I cheered, now I'm standing strong
The race is on and fucking now I grab batons.
Now I'm running as far as my legs'll take me,
I think I need a shrink like Kevin Spacey,
And Hell berates me, but I don't give a shit
Two faggots on my shoulder, I flick off the little bitch
And grab the Angel, Criss-crossed in my grip,
Bent over Jesus and fucked God with the tip.
I'm gone in this shit, I put two and two together
He told me, "Keep doing you. No one can do it better."

Now, I, Can... See the light...
Oh, My, God... It seems, so bright...
All these years living in the dark,
Wanting an end, giving fear the start.
Finding rap, spitting near the heart,
This is me now, shifting gear for art.

[Verse 2: Eedee]
Have a seat, let me tell you a story,
About this guy WordSmith, did a lot of things for me.
I started to like this girl, getting the info,
Saw an opportunity, but pinchin' the window
Cuz my self-esteem was low, freezin' like snow
Thanks for helping me out, I hate being alone.
If I don't love myself, I can't expect love back
This is an unbeaten path, but I'ma make some tracks...
[WordSmith]
I see your confidence is rising up with each passing day
You're finally feeling it, fuck 'em man, forget what they say.
Those faggots who hate, or people who get mad at you, wait-
ing for the second that they see you stumble, but it never comes...
Silently, I hear them grumble, stomping feet, they're causing rumbles
Feelin' jumbled, world just crumbled, but I came and picked you up
And dust you off, now it's time to go get you a close-up...
But fuck it, man... cuz you know what?

[Verse 3: Eedee]
Feelin' so fucking pumped, finally getting something done
Touching up an up & comer, undercover, fucking brother
That's what he feels like, pluderin' real life,
Bad stuff be steel knives, someone to be mine.
Is all I ever wanted now I'm coming to seize time,
Hold this moment in my palm, running to sleep while
I open my eyes to look at this dream unfold, I see the glow
So be the flow, beat the snow right off this mountaintop
I needed my place and I found a spot
My rapping makes thunder jump, and I'll never be down to stop.
[WordSmith]
All I ever wanted was to get you through this
You just push yourself down, but man, the truth is
You're a helluva human, I got a lotta respect,
Quit lookin' down at who you are, you gotta kill the regret.
[Eedee]
Instillin' the best, now, from me this is you.
[WordSmith]
Take my words for what they are, Kit, it's the truth.

[Nefarious]

I was feeling all the verses, both of you did good, i like when songs have back and forth talking expecially when it works, and when it sounds good like you guys made it sound. I also liked the ending of the chorus, but if i had to choose one part of the song that i didnt like it would have to the first two lines of the chorus, it just sounds pretty crazy in my ears, it's very unique though which i like, i just think it maybe couldve been done a bit better.
All ur lyrics are pretty sick though, so i guess i'll pick a favourite part, what stood out to me the most when i gave it a listen was the lines.

I open my eyes to look at this dream unfold, I see the glow
So be the flow, beat the snow right off this mountaintop

I just like the "beat the snow right off this mountaintop" part, haha, the multi's before it are a good build up to make it sound cool.

Great job, keep it up.

[TripleNineThree]

Intro - I really enjoyed the talking in the intro and the conversational format. The beat and the singing comes in perfectly.. It felt really well timed.

Verse 1 - This verse sounded sick. The quality, mixing, and flow were all on point. The only thing I noticed is that it could have better delivery but it sounded good with the beat - nothing really I can knock

Chorus - The chorus sounded good. The mixing could have been better in my opinion. The multiple voices don't blend with one another very good IMO

Verse 2 - This was my favorite verse. Basically the same as verse 1 but I enjoyed it more for some reason

Verse 3/Wordsmith - Wordsmith's lyrics were really good but I felt his verse was lacking in quality compared to yours. Also, the delivery wasn't as well put - there wasn't enough emotion in it

The break between the chorus and the fourth verse was great - fourth verse was as good as the other two with the same things lacking on Wordsmith's part.

Keep it up guys!

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[Eedee]

^ Thanks for the feed, man!

For WordSmith's quality, we didn't tweak the soundboard enough and since I'm now 400 miles away, we couldn't really try again, so I had to try my best with EQ and compression post-recording... This December we're making a big mixtape so we'll make sure his vocals are good to go before we record. But I didn't think they sounded TOO bad.

Glad you liked the track!

[mdemaz]

Nice work.
I can't really put my head around how far you've come.

You started out making random music even if it sounded like shit, which is sorta what I did, and then you just exploded once you got good feedback, which I also did.

Each song you've put out lately is decent.

I can't say that I'm disappointed with your progress.