Red

[Coulter]

Lof: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?p=2023915#p2023915
Red: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D-6PeN7b89Q

As of now, all I have is this shitty-ass mic. Sorry if the volume is a bit low, but maybe you can just read the lyrics. Well, this is one of my first songs, and being in high-school, you might not like it as much as these masterpieces that are being posted in Audio Stage these days.

No obscenities in the vicinity, get assassinated like J-Kennedy,
He petted me, with a hand of un-mastered dentistry.
Are you steppin' me? Or are you bettin' me?
That I can high-kick you like Tekken 3.
Are you beggin' me? For this penny you see?
Are you be-friending me? Or just a little petty G?
Now you'll remember me. Last December she... and I got real tender, see?
So hop in a lake and freeze.. or witness my tendencies.
You're the wind, I'm the breeze. Sike, there's no romance B.
Just between just you and me, you'll find all the hell in me,
I'll commit felonies. You better start tellin' me, where the hell are the keys?
These cops are like pelicans, waste all our shells on them,
Won't make it in less than ten, girl you got a better plan?
Then making a move, with all these police at hand?
This is the end of this, there's really no telling if,
We'll either be shot dead or put in an ambulance.
You should of told me in advance,
To me hittin' those cops, along with that picket fence.
We're gonna get sentences, me for life, you for ten.
There's just too many witnesses, to all the crimes I did,
I really don't care what I said,
This is too much for a man, to handle inside his head,
Might as well run a red. The tank is all the way on E,
Now you just stare at me, wondering where the rest of your life you'll be,
Most likely, for me, it'll be, under the dirt.
There's just a little bit of red on my shirt.
Way before any of these terrible acts occurred,
I heard, that this day was going to happen for sure.

[NoColor]

Uh. Dope lyrics.
Kinda like Tech.
Seriously.

But the over the top rhyming makes your verse lose substance.
But this is a freestyle kind of song so it's fine I guess.
Yeah better mic bro.

Cool verse overall, liked your multis.

Hit me back!

viewtopic.php?f=38&t=149872

[Eedee]

But the over the top rhyming makes your verse lose substance.

I disagree wholeheartedly with this in general.

But yeah, your mic quality is terrible, no offense.... Your lyrics were great, the rhyming and shit was nice. You seemed to have good delivery and emotion, just your mic quality was dragging it down.

[Coulter]

Uh. Dope lyrics.
Kinda like Tech.
Seriously.

But the over the top rhyming makes your verse lose substance.
But this is a freestyle kind of song so it's fine I guess.
Yeah better mic bro.

Cool verse overall, liked your multis.

Hit me back!

viewtopic.php?f=38&t=149872

Naw man, Tech's got that multi shit in the bag. I really appreciate the comparisons tho.

But the over the top rhyming makes your verse lose substance.

I disagree wholeheartedly with this in general.

But yeah, your mic quality is terrible, no offense.... Your lyrics were great, the rhyming and shit was nice. You seemed to have good delivery and emotion, just your mic quality was dragging it down.

Do you disagree with him saying I had over-the-top rhyming, or that rhyming took away from the song?
But yeah, I'm getting a real nice mic on Nov. 11th, so I've been stockpiling some rhymes in a book until then. I really appreciate the kind words, especially from, imo, the best MC on TR.

I loved your recent 'See the Light' verses! They were the shit!

[Eedee]

I was disagreeing with him saying that over the top rhyming can take away from the verses' substance. Look at "Rock Bottom", it's littered with rhymes and the verse still has substance. The only thing without substance is his claim.

And thank you for the kind words, I'm far from the best on TR though, but I'm working on it.

[NoColor]

Uh. I said it makes HIS verse lose substance.
Why'd you bring Rock Bottom to the table?

[Eedee]

Uh. I said it makes HIS verse lose substance.
Why'd you bring Rock Bottom to the table?

I took the "your" as in "in general"... just the way I read it made it seem you saying that, lol, sorry.
But my point still stands. Sorry for the misunderstanding.