by RainMan44 » Nov 9th, '12, 07:30
This wasn't bad. I can see what you were aiming for, and you actually didn't execute it too bad. The rhymes at some points were above average, but you could've been more consistent with it. The flow was dope, and I loved the whole 'slipping into different character's' voices. I liked the chorus, too. It had a eerie aas feel to it when you said "the crazy man's hereee..."
Haha
Overall, not bad...but with a little revising, and with more passion/intensity put into the delivery, it will make it just that much better. But I definitely dig this drop, good ass shit man. Keep pushing!
Mind feeding mine? I'm on the first verse.
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"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."
GOAT![Image](http://i380.photobucket.com/albums/oo248/323cloud323/haiksig.jpg)