MoBrat The Darkness Sample

[MoBrat]

it's the darkness sample, i just recorded not even 5 min ago so not the best mixing + im still tryin to find the best effects 4 my new computer and i just broke my new fuckin mic gonna bring it back n get a new tomorrow..anyways i know it can be improved in many ways and i want all the hard criticism u got i wanna know where i wee i went wrong so i can fix it before my new tape comes out so heres the sample 5 min recording n 5 min mixing cause my mic/headphones broke but tell me where i went worng i woulda spent more time on it n i will 4 the tape but what yall think http://www.sendspace.com/file/ua2om6

[Xray]

first of all that beat, damn i love it, wise choice man

your flowing has sorta improved..which is another step to glory, your aggression is missing you need to take your lyrics more seriosly..like mean each word you say from all your heart cause its the heart that brings the flow and delivery on these sorta songs so work on that when you get that new mic and your mixing aint good also so work on both mixing and delivery cause your beat choice is great

[randomghost]

nice beat....flow and delivery improved alot.....nice mixing....but u should put more energy on this track....cause the beat has this energitic feeling...just try to have more energy wid ur delivery...( remember the track beef is over) u had alotta enerygy in that...just try to do the same wid this one.....but good track....i loved the lyrics....R.T.I 4 life