My Problems 1st single

[<VerbalTouch>]

I know i should really re-record this but only hade time to try about three or four times but hope its not horrible for m first single

http://www.zshare.net/audio/18899302cd4e7831/

[Requiem]

for a first single it's pretty darn good.

the beat's just incredible- 10/10
verse 1- 7/10, cussed way too much, your flow was up and down, and lyrics weren't too great.
chorus- 7.5/10 it's alright,
verse 2- 8/10 better than verse 1, but still kinda up and down.
overall-7.5/10 it's decent, not too much replayability, but great for a first single.

overall, good track. i can see alot of potential, u got a great voice for rap. and if u produced the beat too, then ur already a great producer. vocal quality was good too. keep it up

[<VerbalTouch>]

Thanks bro its a shadowville ithink or sinemia duno but i got the beat from shadowvills page haha anyway thanks for the feedback

Everyone here already knows have to at least say one cuss word in my raps FUCK

[Emadyville]

Ok, here's my breakdown of the song.
Flow-Was way too fast on the first verse, better on the second, pretty good on the third. If you made them all flow like the third the overall song would sound better.
Hook- I didn't like the drawn out my proooblleeeems. I think if you added some more words in there it sould sound better and flow.
Beat- I Liked the beat and the transition into the hook.
Lyrics- I liked how you were being honest on the track, I don't know how deep you are into rhyming but I didn't notice many at all and I think for the most part you should try to rhyme most lines. That's your discretion though.

Overall I didn't like it, the flow, even though it got better, turned me off right from the start. Like I said the rhymes weren't there at all, it was more like you were just talking off the top of your head. The one thing I did like was content except for the first verse, I couldn't tell what you were saying or trying to say on the first verse, the rest was better.

I hoped this helped.

[<VerbalTouch>]

yup thanks for the quick feedback everyone liked teh 3rd verse also

[Emadyville]

yup thanks for the quick feedback everyone liked teh 3rd verse also

Yeah man I wasn't trying to be harsh, and like he said, you do have a good voice, just fuck around with it and make it work for the song. That song had the feel of that Paradime song Better Dayz to me, maybe listen to that and you'll see what I mean.

[<VerbalTouch>]

sure pm it to me

and nah i can take the harsh just get pissed at people when the just say shit like 'it sucked' or 'lame' like one word things that dont really help.

[enjinn]

you sound real passionate...good concept...love the beat...9/10

[Raf Remix]

not bad

but yr rapping off beat in the first verse..my ears cudnt take listening to n e more. how can a rapper rap off beat? its yr business to know the fundementals of on beat offbeat/on bar off bar

nice beat. good lyrics. decent spitting but yr let down by a basic flaw.

ive just mixed Jay (killergoat) off this site.

if u need a mixer to fix stuff for u..hala at me.

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[<VerbalTouch>]

not bad

but yr rapping off beat in the first verse..my ears cudnt take listening to n e more. how can a rapper rap off beat? its yr business to know the fundementals of on beat offbeat/on bar off bar


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cuz were all still getten beter at audioes