A Point to Prove

by **MC Anonymous** » Dec 29th, '08, 02:19

http://www.mediafire.com/?sharekey=1d65 ... b9a8902bda
Worked hard on this, it's on a tupac beat that I <3333 so I decided to flow with it
Tell me what you think!

lyrics

Yo, I'm the illest individual with the typical lyricals
guaranteed to rupture your physical, mental, and spiritual visual
despicable when it comes to rhymes, my gums are frying
committing genocide, these nuns are dieing, my guns are crying
horrid lyrics with morbid spirits spittin' for you to hear it
I spear shit so fear it or get smashed with the sheer hit
I transmit and receive as I proceed to breathe and spit breeze
the condensation crystallizes your sleeves and makes ya shit freeze
message as clear as aleve, believe or be condemned to hell
spittin' fire until the earth only has one stem to dwell
well, my cryptic nature makes sure I speak hidden
your units meek ridden, don't come up to me with your weak writtens
spittin' with the fire mandible I damage you like a savage do
with the mechanical mentality I systematically ravage crews
feeding my creation three rations so it may free nations
these Freemasons start hiding within governmental sea basins
as I use nuclear warfare to make this war bare
before care comes the impulses of corps scares
this storm bares resemblence to a boxer's late hits
and rapping without passion is trying my patience
ancient patience lingers within, writing with the fingers of sin
poisonous poems injected through chrome as the stingers peirce skin
ocular messages hidden within writtens, drivin' with real spittin'
innocence's seal's rippin', suddenly the steel's slippin'
numerous holes are gaping, as every toll is scraping
thunder, destruction, this junction explodes, the souls are shaping
themselves wonder in their slumber ''is my life just a number?''
origins reveal the feelings of attack, as my lust is cumbered
potentially, the sentimental entity may gently tend to me
readily on bended knee my tended pleas are ignored instantly
optical fibers with biological wires release the tears of pain
violent years to gain vehemently fear this game that adheres shame
energetic with the bearded mane the battle lion consumes competition
these new addition steel plated boots are used to stomp the bitchin
obvious lyricists deliver deceases guaranteed to infect a clitoris
a quired venom leakin' from my lips got me sayin ''what type of spit is this?''
linguistic incisions applied with precision to the brain's hemisphere
leaving bloodshed and bodies on hospital beds when I'm near.

I got A Point to Prove to All...

by **MC Anonymous** » Dec 29th, '08, 02:24

Website · by **Solace** » Dec 29th, '08, 02:29

You cant just bump it in 2 minutes man...

by **Jay-19** » Dec 29th, '08, 02:33

Yeah man.
You're improving massively every time I hear a new drop form you.
Flow seems to be on point most of the track, it strays away a little bit from time to time though, but nothing major.
I'm having problems hearing some of the lines, it's just a big slur. So try to rap your lines a little clearer and it's all good man.
And I'd like to see some more tracks with hooks, because I loved your hook on your second track.

That's all I had to say for now, I'm pretty tired right now so, I'll check it again tomorrow and see if I want to add anything.

Props man, keep pumping out tracks! :y:

by **Boston** » Dec 29th, '08, 02:35

i really havent had time to feed, but i third time track is the best by far i think. your flow fell off though when you were going towards then end. work on some pronounciation, at points it feels like your rushing but its really good your dropping each day, keep practicing and youll be a top emcee in no time (yeah i know im feeding a different track in this topic) but i cant download it now for some reason from that link, something about a server problem. i recommend a zshare link (mp3) for now on, itll be easier. ill peep it when it lets me.

by **Boston** » Dec 29th, '08, 02:40

yeah, i love this beat, i might record to it on tuesday when i hit the studio. damn if you lived closer id drive to ya fuckin crib haha. but foreal. you are improving, your flow is off a lot though to. at points it sounds like your running out a breath and just reading from the paper. but you are improving. keep it up man, if you had the delivery down and all that with your lyrics itd be amazing
keep it up

by **MC Anonymous** » Dec 29th, '08, 02:41

Thanks bros!

by **MC Anonymous** » Dec 30th, '08, 21:01

Chet Starr wrote:I agree that it sounds like your running out of breath & the flow isn't very entertaining.

quality is alot better then that first track

lyrics still cool lol

still improving fast

Thanks dude! :y:

by **Skorp** » Dec 30th, '08, 21:45

Shit's pretty dope overrall. Lyrics were good. Quality was horrible. Work on your confidence; you have energy but i dont FEEL it..feel me? you're just kinda yelling it; spit it, how it came to you. You're major flaw is your ability to spit on beat..cuz you lost it a lot. Other than that i give it a :y:

by **Ka0t1c** » Dec 31st, '08, 01:20

Skorp wrote:Shit's pretty dope overrall. Lyrics were good. Quality was horrible. Work on your confidence; you have energy but i dont FEEL it..feel me? you're just kinda yelling it; spit it, how it came to you. You're major flaw is your ability to spit on beat..cuz you lost it a lot. Other than that i give it a

i'd say i'd have to agree, it was pretty good tho

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