I Won't Let You Go

by **MC Anonymous** » Jan 29th, '09, 05:00

http://www.mediafire.com/?mqknzzx5wwu

lyrics;

Everyday I walk, I get smacked back in blocks
crack the lock, my life is broken, I'm in shock
I can't stand it, misery is in my brain
torture and suffering, to thin for names
for sin a game, is just broken hearts
spoken darts, I don't feel my swollen parts
open shards, slash my wrists with spite
grip the slice, bleed right into night
strings and cords, my life is planted
slanted knives, I try but blasted
I cry inside, for I must remain a boy
sighs do hide, unable to retain my joy
died a kid, all because I tried to hid
gashed wide by this, you paid my bid
I loved you, now you run away
say it once more, as we go our seperate ways.

I've never cried, as much as I did today
tears fell down, I kneel down and pray
please forgive, I never did you wrong
sing this song, can we all get along x2

Alone, beaten, smashed, and she doesn't care
I needed to leave, I just couldn't be there
my tears are found, my years are drowned
fear goes around, sound lies to my hounds
entities, looking down at me with shame
if this was a game, then why am I sane
I can't take the pain, I just want to die
haunting eyes cry when by my side
dimming lights, heaven rejects my soul
now subject to coal, I burn in holes
yearn for love, eyes a well of tears
spell the fear, not so swell to ears
hear my voice, forgive me so I may
end my life a boy, slip into the days
grip onto my grasp, you let me go
if I do die, you'll never forget me though.

I've never cried, as much as I did today
tears fell down, I kneel down and pray
please forgive, I never did you wrong
sing this song, can we all get along x2

An author of life, tales of the great
failed cause' of weight, filled with this hate
I lost my light, at a cost of morals
a story with no end, only quarrels
vision black and white, is this right?
no color without light, can't see my sight
I tried to mend, only made it bend
for fate it ends, no matter what you send
I will always have you, in my heart
from the start, I wouldn't ever break apart
You were like a sister, now your gone
for my farewell, I'll give you this song
I have never hurt more, then I am now
may you see how sincere I am now
I'll continue to hold, until you let go
till' then I just wanted to let you know.....

I've never cried, as much as I did today
tears fell down, I kneel down and pray
please forgive, I never did you wrong
sing this song, can we all get along x4

by **gutawafang** » Jan 29th, '09, 07:27

As usual. I like all these love songs. :happy:

Definitely great. :y:

It is in my favorites folder.

by **Slim Zaddy** » Jan 29th, '09, 10:38

it's pretty sick MC , it's the best i have heard from you .. i really love your voice in it , it's full of anger and emotions ,, really loved it .. lyrics and rhymes were great i hve said that to you in creative writings ,, your flow was sick too .. and the beat was very dope .. and i really loved chorus it's pretty sick over all it's sick .. keep it comming.. gd job here bro 9/10 ... keep it up :y:

by **MC Anonymous** » Jan 29th, '09, 14:33

Thanks all for the feed, glad you enjoyed it.

by **Ka0t1c** » Jan 29th, '09, 14:48

1st line, should it be. "i tried to hide" ?

by **MC Anonymous** » Jan 29th, '09, 14:50

Kaotic wrote:1st line, should it be. "i tried to hide" ?

Yes but I used creative license

by **Ka0t1c** » Jan 29th, '09, 14:52

no, that aint creative :whistle:

by **MC Anonymous** » Jan 29th, '09, 14:53

Kaotic wrote:no, that aint creative

Yeah it is. :y:

by **Emadyville** » Jan 29th, '09, 16:41

Wow I literally am writing a song to this beat haha, the lyrics were good, some words seemed to be added just for rhyming, but it didn't really take away from song. I thought your emotion was def there, flow was good for the most part, hook was good, and the ending line of the second verse was a dope way to finish that verse :y:

by **MC Anonymous** » Jan 29th, '09, 16:45

Emadyville wrote:Wow I literally am writing a song to this beat haha, the lyrics were good, some words seemed to be added just for rhyming, but it didn't really take away from song. I thought your emotion was def there, flow was good for the most part, hook was good, and the ending line of the second verse was a dope way to finish that verse

Thanks dude :y:

by **DelinQuent** » Jan 29th, '09, 17:57

flow is extremely jerky on the first verse. lyrics are decent. didnt like the hid instead of hide for sake of rhyme thing.

hook, i like, great delivery, good flow. good hook

same flow of the second verse, you keep pausing between random words. if you had pauses that were like steady then i would recognize it as part of the flow, but it doesnt seem to be, seems like you just didnt write the flow out well. again, lyrics are decent

3rd verse flow starts out good. then "i'll give you this song" and the flow gets choppy with that line. 3rd verse was the best in this song

overall 6/10 due to the choppy flow. what i recommend to help with the flow is to try to count some syllables, if one like has 13, the next line cant have 6 or it's gonna sound fucked up. so try adding small filler words, like for example instead of saying can't, try can not to add an extra syllable but still say the same exact thing. so basically, just make sure the lines have a similar cadence to them before you record them. keep working tho, i loved your delivery throughout the entire song. lots of emotion but not over the top. keep it up and keep improving :y:

by **MC Anonymous** » Jan 29th, '09, 18:58

DelinQuent wrote:flow is extremely jerky on the first verse. lyrics are decent. didnt like the hid instead of hide for sake of rhyme thing.

hook, i like, great delivery, good flow. good hook

same flow of the second verse, you keep pausing between random words. if you had pauses that were like steady then i would recognize it as part of the flow, but it doesnt seem to be, seems like you just didnt write the flow out well. again, lyrics are decent

3rd verse flow starts out good. then "i'll give you this song" and the flow gets choppy with that line. 3rd verse was the best in this song

overall 6/10 due to the choppy flow. what i recommend to help with the flow is to try to count some syllables, if one like has 13, the next line cant have 6 or it's gonna sound fucked up. so try adding small filler words, like for example instead of saying can't, try can not to add an extra syllable but still say the same exact thing. so basically, just make sure the lines have a similar cadence to them before you record them. keep working tho, i loved your delivery throughout the entire song. lots of emotion but not over the top. keep it up and keep improving

Thanks for the in-depth feed man, appreciate it. :y:

Website · by **Solace** » Jan 31st, '09, 05:46

Flow was decent on the verses man. Beat was good for what you were doing. Hook was meh, didn't really feel it. Flow was on spot for the hook though, and so were the lyrics (cept Can we all get along?). Your breathing is good especially for having bronchitis. Thought more overlays couldve been in the verses. Your delivery in the verses+hook overall was fine. Improved man. 7/10 dude. :y:

by **Tomega** » Feb 1st, '09, 21:42

Nice.. wouldnt expect otherwise..

Really like it, man.. you deliver sincere

by **Le Tunisien** » Feb 8th, '09, 23:56

man this is really sick, i can feel it

good job :flower:

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