SajN - Happy Birthday (Only One Verse)

[SajN]

This is actually a very personal song, but since I write personal stuff I decided to put it up here.
From the lyrics you can probably guess why I wrote this.
That's why it's very simple..
And I honestly think that my pronounciation here is the best I've had in my songs

here's the lyrics from CW section: http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=58671

And here is the verse:

http://www.zshare.net/audio/5787400271eeab08/



I haven't fed lately, sorry for that, I am just busy, but I will do, I promise. If you feed my song, give me a link to your song and I will feed

[threeandtwenty]

really liked it...sometimes i feel like i dont want to spoil a deep verse with drivel too,so i think its dope with no follow up

...you have such an eastern accent on this (east of the world)

[SajN]

Thanks for checking out

I am from Norway, so that's north
(but I am pakistani)

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

your expanding is really extreme on this....im not feelin that so much...lyrics-wise i already told you its some deep shit...delievery was oookay for this kind of track...nice and calme...

[jigglinj]

sweet ssuper song

[SajN]

Thank C-Riz and jiggylinj

[mcZu]

Flow was consitent, though it got shaky at certain spots. Delivery was ok, had the type of voice which brought the emotions over that you wanted to bring over. Pronounciation was a bit fucked up, I could understand the words nontheless, so not bad. Beat was great, lyrics were deep, nothing to complex, but what you wrote down came from the heart...so good job on that. Not a bad track, and I hope you gonna work things out with that friend of yours.

[DelinQuent]

flow was very choppy in some spots. i dont really mind the extending of words, but if you're gonna extend them, try to throw some melody on them

delivery was weak as well, but that might be because english isnt your first language, practice will make that much better

lyrics were the strong point, i love deep songs so i enjoyed the lyrics.

keep working, the more songs you do, the better you'll get

[Tash8]

From the lyrics you can probably guess why I wrote this.

not if we can't understand you to get the lyrics...

work on your delivery and fix ur accent.

[slimsoxshady]

i get where ur coming from on this track, but in my opinion its pretty boring and simple...just my two cents

[SajN]

Flow was consitent, though it got shaky at certain spots. Delivery was ok, had the type of voice which brought the emotions over that you wanted to bring over. Pronounciation was a bit fucked up, I could understand the words nontheless, so not bad. Beat was great, lyrics were deep, nothing to complex, but what you wrote down came from the heart...so good job on that. Not a bad track, and I hope you gonna work things out with that friend of yours.

Thank you .. yeah, we're back as friends

flow was very choppy in some spots. i dont really mind the extending of words, but if you're gonna extend them, try to throw some melody on them

delivery was weak as well, but that might be because english isnt your first language, practice will make that much better

lyrics were the strong point, i love deep songs so i enjoyed the lyrics.

keep working, the more songs you do, the better you'll get

Thank you

From the lyrics you can probably guess why I wrote this.

not if we can't understand you to get the lyrics...

work on your delivery and fix ur accent.

I am working on that .. thank you

i get where ur coming from on this track, but in my opinion its pretty boring and simple...just my two cents

Yeah, I understand it is boring, but the thing is that this wasn't made for entertaining.. and wasn't supposed to get released.. but I released it anyway.. thank you