I'm Gone.

[MC Anonymous]

http://www.zshare.net/audio/61731095ed150b86/

I could barely even see, what was going on with me
damn shame, my hands came
and sucked the life outta me
being possesed, being used as some stress
if I knew what you knew I wouldn't be pressed
I knew I couldn't say yes, if I did I was wrong
but what should I do with the cuts on my arms
I always stay psychotic when I'm rubbing my palms
inside narcotics and I'm loving them all
It's a difficult decision, it's a real temptation
do whatever I can to step aside stipulations
Now I have a razor blade, crying
denying the people who see me cause' I don't like their lieing
Everyday I would walk in rooms bitter
I was just another person drinking heavy liquor
Vomiting my sorrow and I never saw tomorrow
my bones were hollow and it echoed when I wallowed
I took the razor blade, sliced vertically, hurting me
horizontally also to inject my death remedy
never knew what life was, never wanted to
If death brings life, I'm part of all of you
I'm talking as a spirit, if you hear it don't fear it
because I love everybody that really wants to come near this
so come and show me that love me, and enjoy what I put out
because I do this for you and not for me, I'm out,

[neversnooze]

nice choice of beat! i felt you on this track. you have improved to the point where you can flow with the beat but your delivery needs work.in other words, i cant tell if your pausing or breathing or hisping when you spit your rhymes but i am hearing one of the three so if you can break away from that and increase the volume of your voice it would be perfect.

7/10

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

the intro was prolly the best thing in this audio lol....
beat was pretty simple....was nice but somthin was misisng...but cant blame ya
your flow went up and down...when you tried to link 2lines then your flow crushed together...'specially here

Now I have a razor blade, crying
denying the people who see me cause' I don't like their lieing

keep working

[James R.]

Hey man sorry I didn't feed this on MSN yesterday. I'll do it here. With delivery this is probably your best to date, keep doing whatever it is that you were doing. The lyrics are solid, but you've never had a problem with that. The only problem with this is that while you stay on beat it doesn't really flow at all times. The point C-Riz mentioned was probably the worst "cry---ing deny---ing" You want that shit to be as smooth as possible. Especially for what you're trying to use it for. I'd definitely re-record because I like the track and if you could get the flow right it would be tight as virgin vag.

[randomghost]

beat is too slow and hard to flow on, i can see u struggling wid da flow here...choose a faster beat ..mm...lyrics is good....keep on workin on ur flow and choose a beat that can fit it right,,,keep them coming.. cheers

[Wreck]

This is dope Anon....I'm really feeling it

beat is nice and fits the tempo and theme of the track...

lyrics are nice, 4/5
flow is good, but like people said, has a few little flaws, keep at it, 3.5/5
beat selection & delivery 4/5
overall 4/5

good shit man, keep up the good work...

btw, when i get on the mic again in a few weeks, I wanna collab with ya....I know you were before but still interested? Let me know, thanks man.

[MC Anonymous]

This is dope Anon....I'm really feeling it

beat is nice and fits the tempo and theme of the track...

lyrics are nice, 4/5
flow is good, but like people said, has a few little flaws, keep at it, 3.5/5
beat selection & delivery 4/5
overall 4/5

good shit man, keep up the good work...

btw, when i get on the mic again in a few weeks, I wanna collab with ya....I know you were before but still interested? Let me know, thanks man.

We can collab anytime you want to bro.

[threeandtwenty]

i can see your experimenting more,the flows very different from your usual...you usually pack in many multis in the same 2 lines.overall i think it was pretty good...i really dont know what you could do to make your voice sound better on record...try a little deeper delivery.according to me your main weakness is your delivery/voice...its too choppy,hard to listen to.

[Wreck]

This is dope Anon....I'm really feeling it

beat is nice and fits the tempo and theme of the track...

lyrics are nice, 4/5
flow is good, but like people said, has a few little flaws, keep at it, 3.5/5
beat selection & delivery 4/5
overall 4/5

good shit man, keep up the good work...

btw, when i get on the mic again in a few weeks, I wanna collab with ya....I know you were before but still interested? Let me know, thanks man.

We can collab anytime you want to bro.

Sounds good. I sent you a PM about it

[Kez]

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I agree


No i liked this song. The flow needs work for sure but the lyrics were good and the delivery captured the emotion (though it still needs some work to sound more natural). And i actually liked the beat. Concept i thought kind of zig zagged cause at the end you talked about people feeling your music while most of the song was you "slicing vertically with a razor blade".

But yeah, good shit, just keep working on the flow and delivery, cause lyrics you got down mostly.