what we live for ( 2nd track)

[Slim Zaddy]

it's a track i made before an hour , for me it's much better than the first one i made , let me know what you think ,,


http://www.zshare.net/audio/646289457293613c/

feedback would be much appreciated

So this is it , this is what we live for , a sweet love
Where it does’nt exsists anymore , we only get pain
And heart sore, and deeply inside much more

have you ever been in love before now
Now look into my eyes And tell me what you see,
Tell me what you see , and tell them how it’s unique ,
I love a girl but now I gotta go on look for the happiness And leave all the mourn ,
and get out of my shit and all my dirty world
Now hey you all , why don’t you sit down, listen to my song
And tell me what is it about , fuck what do you think , shit in who you’re
I don’t give a fuck, yeah I’m a retard , this life is sucks
Likes a fucking runed guitar yeah I’m in love,
But that’s not enough ,cuz my whole life just being harsh sucks

how I’m about to know , my heart’s gonna blow
And no body knows, i’m alone with my thoughts
I’m praying for god , for some aid support
You all better know zaid is about to blow ,

Now I gotta walk in this road alone
All By myself going back to my home
The only girl I know , she broke my bone
And now after all , I’m waiting for some more ,,



When your soul is tired and your heart is weak
Do you think of my love as one way street
Well it runs both ways, open up your eyes
Can't you see me here, how can you deny

Every endless night has a dawning day
Every darkest sky has a shining ray
It takes a lot to laugh as your tears go by
But you can find me here till your tears run dry

Now every tear I drop it get’s out dry
It takes a lot of love to drop it aside
How could you say you care when you don’t
How could I biiven in you , now I wont

I remember when she laughed so hard that she cried.
I remember when she grabbed my heart with her eyes.
I remember when she first thanked God for her life.
Now, I just wish that she could remember mine.

[Slim Zaddy]

common guys 32 views , and not a single feed

[Slim Zaddy]

post lyrics

i post them

[Slim Zaddy]

i enjoyed it man

thanks bro, much appreciated from ya ... glad you enjoyed it

[BILI]

It was pretty good man

[randomghost]

beat is ok...track is gud...flow not really on point .lyrics is good..delivery is nice......keep them coming...just try to make ur delivery more powerful and stronger 2 bring more vibe to the track....keep them comin..cheers

[B.A.D.]

first of all, you need to fix youre structure, like the way you write, for example the amount of syllables you put in a bar and how you will flow it

you need desperatly someone to help you on the mixing, so it can sound more pro

also, you need an own delivery, show the emotion when you rap, feel the beat and flow with it

but practice makes the master

[Slim Zaddy]

It was pretty good man

thanks bro

beat is ok...track is gud...flow not really on point .lyrics is good..delivery is nice......keep them coming...just try to make ur delivery more powerful and stronger 2 bring more vibe to the track....keep them comin..cheers

thanks for the feed randomghost , yeah actually that's what i'm working on at this moment , vipe and these staff , next track i will be workin on that ,, thanks again

first of all, you need to fix youre structure, like the way you write, for example the amount of syllables you put in a bar and how you will flow it

you need desperatly someone to help you on the mixing, so it can sound more pro

also, you need an own delivery, show the emotion when you rap, feel the beat and flow with it

but practice makes the master

good feed , i will take the amount of syllables in consider , and yeah i dont know how to mix music ,, what i do , is i run in the beat and rap over it ,, so next time i'm gonna need someone help .. so thanks for the feed Big Ax-D,, much appreciated