It's Not Over [Final]

[Tash8]

Title: It's Not Over
Link/Download: http://www.zshare.net/audio/65225084b21cbb92/
Description: My girlfriend of 8 month left for college, and I won't be seeing here again for three months.
Lyrics:

keep thinking of the times where we couldn't keep our hands off each other
the way we used to kick it, the way we'd smile at each other
looking back now it seems so far in the distant
but every time i think of you, i think of the instance
i had to see you leave, now i'm just left with pictures
and memories worth all my happiness
now i bet i sound like a depressed freak who lacks any sense
but before i get carried too far away
I wanna tell you how i prepared for our first date
i opened my closet, threw all my clothes down
i changed my outfit about 5 times, no joke now
ha, anyways, i wanna let u know, even though
your so far way, your still with me, each and every day
yeah, each and every day, each and every day

cause it's not over, no it's not over
hold on to me, you can lean on my shoulders
it's not over, no it's not over
your love warms me up as the nights get colder (uh)

rewind to this date jan first 2009
i'm heading to this party with two friends of mine
little did i know, what's gonnna be in store for me
one drunk girl acting all --- for me
you finally wake up and there was something that you say
"tamer and a junior" with a smile on your face
we end up moving to the living room
the clock keeps ticking and it hits around two
a few of us up and i'm laying next to you
crazy thing happens, i get knife stab
blood gushing everywhere, guess it's all true
nothing good ever happens after it turns two
but a few weeks later, i'm completely mistaken
jan 26, we're around the pool table playin
7 month later, and i'm still here saying
the same thing, i love you,

cause it's not over, no it's not over
hold on to me, you can lean on my shoulders
it's not over, no it's not over
your love warms me up as the nights get colder (uh)

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

volume could be louder overall....
especially hook and especially end of 2nd verse....
actually the old "each and every day" part was smoother to me lol...mixing wise
flow seems better now.....did you change somthin
change volumes and you good

[Tash8]

volume could be louder overall....
especially hook and especially end of 2nd verse....
actually the old "each and every day" part was smoother to me lol...mixing wise
flow seems better now.....did you change somthin
change volumes and you good

i rerecorded it and everything, and each and everday i changed up the way i say it

I like the volume levels, i dont like my vocals to take over the whole song, the beat is sad itself so that can add it's own emotion.
thanks a lot for feed!

[Kez]

Not my type of song at all, really.
The beat is nice though.
For a concept i'm not a fan of you did it well.
Lyrics are deep and even though they're simple they tell a clearer story, and it obviously has to be slightly dumbed down for the more casual audience that will hear this. Flow goes good with the beat, and the delivery compliments the slow flow well.
Hook fits well, and ties in with the echo at the he first verse, dunno if that was intentional.
I'm trying to be as in-depth as i can really be here.

So really basically, a very good deep song. I liked it, and i don't normally like these type of songs.
Definately your best work to date, maybe that's due to the motivation or natural progression, but it sounds better than your previous efforts in all ways.

[Tash8]

Thanks guys

[Tash8]

Yeah you sound a bit better on this one nice work

thanks you!

[B.A.D.]

damnzz this sounds clean!

the layovers were well fixed man, good job on that

like I said, the story is really good and I bet she's gonna love it

the only little thing, is maybe the vocals could be a bit louder... but overall, greatness

[Slim Zaddy]

yeah ,, that's a lot better ,, give it to her .. she will liked it . i'm sure , and gd luck man ,,

[Tash8]

thx

[enjinn]

liked the hook...real nice lyrics...good track...she really will like this

[Tornado]

Didn't like the flow you went on this man. Only the end of the second verse and chorus sounded right as it sounded there weren't enought syllables and was stop-start. Lyrics were simple but hey, you didn't make it to be overly lyrical. The point where the beatboxing kicks in, the volume just drops from the vocals massively, otherwise ruining a near faultless mix. You were too fast for the beat but hey, i''m not usually the guy to ask about love songs. Your girl should love it though, something meaningful which money can't buy

[Tash8]

Didn't like the flow you went on this man. Only the end of the second verse and chorus sounded right as it sounded there weren't enought syllables and was stop-start. Lyrics were simple but hey, you didn't make it to be overly lyrical. The point where the beatboxing kicks in, the volume just drops from the vocals massively, otherwise ruining a near faultless mix. You were too fast for the beat but hey, i''m not usually the guy to ask about love songs. Your girl should love it though, something meaningful which money can't buy

appreciate the indepth feed..

most people here know i can do complex lyrics with wordplay, multis and shit.. but i dont see a reason for it on a track like this, i feel if i did that i'd be forcing shit.. so i kept it simple, she already knows the story i'm basically reminiscing.. btw it's not that there isn't enough syllables cause if u notice there's line where i change up my flow and it doesn't do that anymore, but i really like extending a word, like i'm trying to italicize it basically... but i understand what u mean... i'll fix the low volume now thanks!