*fresh* make that last M.pyre

[M-Pyre]

whats up peeps

I know it has been some time since the last time I posted something on this forum, but now the time has finally come!

"make that last" is my new single showing you what I'm capable of, both producing wise and rapping wise.

song:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/63062931fe8f86e4/

also, here's the youtube vid. the quality is not as good but still, it's easier.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JMBBHuqdyzI

I will return feed!


lyrics:

(Chorus)

Lay back, relax and enjoy the ride, we’re gonna make that last till the morning light
Haystacks of grass and a 40 aside, we’re gonna make that last till the morning light

(Verse 1)
I’m leaning against a pillar, witness bitches drinking liquor till their liver quivers/
And begin to strip a little bit till their nipples are visi-ble/
Rhyming every syllable is getting old. So I’ll hop in a car and run you over like Fred Flintstone/
A full fledge kill zone, exclusive like the game. I’m using the mic to spray/
The usual that you might say. But do apply a change, cause a juvenile might say/
That you was quite plain, or ordinary. I play the chords that vary/
A sort of cherry like icing on the cake or spices on a stake/
Lets ride through the state without a tom-tom cause GPS gives you away like a license plate/
Think thee opposite like stationary climate-change is a convenient lie/
I’m the greediest guy. So please leave me alive, while your feeble speech is unwanted like peakage spikes/

(Verse 2)
Fuck fighting urges. It is my purpose that my subconscious arrives the surface/
While my mind is blurting along the lines of a circus. I wonder why I’m smirking/
I just wanna try, lurking, a couple of dumb couples and stumble upon trouble/
While I’m breaking them up, heh, then leave the broad. Guess I’ve shaken it up/
Now let the hating erupt, I’m gonna be saving it up, like I’d be gaming to much/
But I’ll behave and stay in touch like a pedophile without intercourse/
Little boys dig the noise, it’s the voice. That was fucked up and a lot weirder/
But I wouldn’t give a damn if I had to block a river/
A living rhythm written in the lyricism kicking. While switching swift,
Equipped with quick lips twitching. With a thick mix that rips and isn’t in the/
Clipping zone. Pick a bone, everybody sit alone, or get along and pick a song/

(Verse 3)
People be talking about my freshness for years. Reckless with stretching ya ears/
Still the recession is here. Damn peasants letting it settle embedding the fear/
And their spreading it clear. At this level it’s severe. But I’m insouciant/
So accuse me of using my view through musical amusement/
It’s beautiful and soothing. In tune with the youth like the moon is to thee ocean/
I’m so hot, I’m afraid to use deodorant. Cause, I amaze like a labyrinth/
Meddling with I is like trying to temper with an avalanche/
Get half an inch of cannabis and let yourself relax a bit/
Then catch a bit of passionate imaginative happiness/
I’m hardcore like terrorscitz. A cat that’ll never quit/
Can it be mendacity, never to be prejudice? I bet it is/
Intelligence isn’t for the faint of heart/
So you better take apart your heart and have a change of heart/


plz treat this like a bed of nails, and don't sleep on it.

enjoy

[M-Pyre]

no love?

[Slim Zaddy]

sick track man , i enjoyed it ,, flow and delivery were sick ,,,,,, really ,, you got all under control , i liked the beat ,, and mixing is so fucking dope ,,,,,,,,,,,, keep them comming ,, 9/10

[Slim Zaddy]

sick track man , i enjoyed it ,, flow and delivery were sick ,,,,,, really ,, you got all under control , i liked the beat ,, and mixing is so fucking dope ,,,,,,,,,,,, keep them comming ,, 9/10

what would make it 10/10 for you .. ?

nothin is 100% perfect ,, that's why

[Slim Zaddy]

what would make it 10/10 for you .. ?

nothin is 100% perfect ,, that's why

gd answer lol

anytime bro

[mcZu]

Flow was a bit off in the first and last verse. Second verse is by far the best. Lyrics are not bad, delivery lacks a bit though. Mixing is good, beat is a bit repetitive. Overall it's not a bad song.

Btw, your from the Netherlands?

[M-Pyre]

$(@TTY B@Y: hehe,I appreciate it. be sure to spread the music around tho

Slim Zaddy: thnks man. the next song will be 99.99 % I'm sure of it

mcZu: ja man, limburg dan wel (kan je m'n zachte G horen :P) in iedergeval, bedankt voor je constructieve terugkoppeling, ik apprecieer het!


keep the feed coming

[mcZu]

mcZu: ja man, limburg dan wel (kan je m'n zachte G horen :P) in iedergeval, bedankt voor je constructieve terugkoppeling, ik apprecieer het!

Your welcome man, you just need to put in some more emotion and work on that flow a lil' bit. You record in dutch as well? I've like one recorded freestyle in Dutch, lol.

[M-Pyre]

mcZu: ja man, limburg dan wel (kan je m'n zachte G horen :P) in iedergeval, bedankt voor je constructieve terugkoppeling, ik apprecieer het!

Your welcome man, you just need to put in some more emotion and work on that flow a lil' bit. You record in dutch as well? I've like one recorded freestyle in Dutch, lol.

aight, I'll do that. and no, I don't record in my native language, I just keep pushing the envelope on my favorite language

enne, laat eens horen, die freestyle

[mcZu]

^I PM'd it.

[M-Pyre]

sure thing!


I have a need for feed people !

[Xray]

You got a nice chilling vibe to your style man, I like it. Agree with Zu, the flow is lacking abit, a lot of times where your off flow. Although the delivery was perfect I think, you have that pain to your voice so that's emotion there already, no need to be screaming your ass off on a chilling track. Lyrics did there job well, I thought it was well written and unique, cause your flow sounds unique to me. Keep practicing that flow you got going on and you should be sounding 100% in no time. And dope beat, nicely made man, sounds like a Nas stillmatic beat kinda, anyways good shit.

[M-Pyre]

You got a nice chilling vibe to your style man, I like it. Agree with Zu, the flow is lacking abit, a lot of times where your off flow. Although the delivery was perfect I think, you have that pain to your voice so that's emotion there already, no need to be screaming your ass off on a chilling track. Lyrics did there job well, I thought it was well written and unique, cause your flow sounds unique to me. Keep practicing that flow you got going on and you should be sounding 100% in no time. And dope beat, nicely made man, sounds like a Nas stillmatic beat kinda, anyways good shit.

thnks man


tho I have to ask, where did I go off beat? cause I can rap these verses in the exact same way on any other beat, doesn't matter what tempo it is, as long as it's in the range of this beat. so, as far as I know, I'm on beat


anyways, thnks fo the feedback, I appreciate it!

more would be nice tho

[M-Pyre]

no more love to be given?