verses of the gods - feat - pioneer

[enjinn]

the concept of this track is us being the frist beings that existed...i go first and do the first half of the thrird verse...pioneer does the second verse, hook and second half of the third verse...all feedback is much appreciated and will be returned... http://www.zshare.net/audio/667787296c2dc099/

lyrics for first verse...

yo i spit lightening, i hold earth
and my grip's tightening, i kissed light and its still shining
i thaught man, how to speak with the tongue
before that i was god giving heat to the sun
they see me and run, i was born before time existed
i can take every life i giveth
its a fact that my mind is gifted, ithe the cause
of the dark and the stars that are shining vivid
demons live, im the thoughts of the Christ, im the dawn and the night
yo i stand in the rain and turn water to ice
i was born without life, when my energy flows
matter moves into forms that i like
when i rhyme on tracks, spirit awakes from the lines i rap
i was trapped, in the earth when the skies were black
fid the facts, when im asking you something
the universe was born when i spat into nothing

lyrics for the first half of the third verse...

yo your thoughts are bland, yes im the god in man
i was carrying life before it walked on land
i made man with my breath, then i battle with death
for the right to put light in your animal flesh
but the light of your soul, is getting rather dull
my mind is strong enough to stop your thoughts and crack your skull
listen now, when im sharing the gift
before i end all life just by clenching my fist

[enjinn]

uppin...can i get some feed? hahah

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

pioneer has a nice quality...and a nice swagger.....sounded like he got everything on lock
hook was nice....
your verse had some nice multies "thoughts of christ//dawn and the night//water to ice" like those
your flow was shaky sometime...pronouncation was decent but can be improved a lil bit...
nice nice track...really

edit: the intro and outro were sick....nice use of german lines in the outro aswell

[enjinn]

thanks for the feedback man!