a snippet from a song I’m doin ..

[Slim Zaddy]

tell me what do you think


http://www.zshare.net/audio/6748845945b53651/

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

beat is nice and defo could be worked on...
i dont know if this is just the intro...but if thats a verse its very boring flow wise
try to put some words inbetween your lines..would help
pronouncation can be improved too...you clearly have an accent but you can smooth it out
this will come with the time i think...keep doin ur thang!

[Slim Zaddy]

beat is nice and defo could be worked on...
i dont know if this is just the intro...but if thats a verse its very boring flow wise
try to put some words inbetween your lines..would help
pronouncation can be improved too...you clearly have an accent but you can smooth it out
this will come with the time i think...keep doin ur thang!

mmm, thanks my bro ,, yeah this was just an intro , it's not a verse, ,, and its slow a little bit , cuz my verses are rapping , i write my verses but still i'm practicing on the delivery for the song , ,,,,,,,,,,,, but thanks man for ya feed, much appreciated ,, ,,,,,,,, but what did you mean , by smooth it out bro

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

umm you can make it not so noticeable like it is at the moment
i dont know if i took the wrong path..but i been listen to some westcoast rapper and they kind of slur couple of letters..like put a lil american in your accent....get me?

[Slim Zaddy]

umm you can make it not so noticeable like it is at the moment
i dont know if i took the wrong path..but i been listen to some westcoast rapper and they kind of slur couple of letters..like put a lil american in your accent....get me?

yeah man,, i got you ,:) ,,,,,,,, i will try it out ,, thanks for the advice bro