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Re: JBM - Music Box

Postby JBM » Dec 15th, '09, 05:38

Everyone has their opinion. However, I'm still happy with it.
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Re: JBM - Music Box

Postby Xray » Dec 15th, '09, 05:53

Your problem is you have no style. Your flow is nothing special and it doesn't have much rhythm to it. People are saying you whisper because you have no rhythm to your raps. If you had rhythm, then you'd have flow and you'd automatically sound much more comfortable with what your saying, making your delivery (tone of voice) more listenable. From there on you practice and master.

Good luck with it, but one things for sure, you are not Eminem. So don't even think about using Eminem concepts on your tracks, and the best way to do that is keep away from Eminem beats and think of you not Eminem. On this track, you used an Eminem beat along with an Eminem like concept, causing the listeners to think your jacking Eminems style, therefore original is what you need to be.
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Re: JBM - Music Box

Postby JBM » Dec 15th, '09, 06:27

Xray wrote:Your problem is you have no style. Your flow is nothing special and it doesn't have much rhythm to it. People are saying you whisper because you have no rhythm to your raps. If you had rhythm, then you'd have flow and you'd automatically sound much more comfortable with what your saying, making your delivery (tone of voice) more listenable. From there on you practice and master.

Good luck with it, but one things for sure, you are not Eminem. So don't even think about using Eminem concepts on your tracks, and the best way to do that is keep away from Eminem beats and think of you not Eminem. On this track, you used an Eminem beat along with an Eminem like concept, causing the listeners to think your jacking Eminems style, therefore original is what you need to be.


Care to elaborate on how it's a Eminem like concept? When i heard the instrumental i thought id give it a go, before even hearing the actual song (so i could avoid copying him at all).

Anyway thanks for your post and the advice.
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Re: JBM - Music Box

Postby Xray » Dec 15th, '09, 06:43

JBM wrote:
Xray wrote:Your problem is you have no style. Your flow is nothing special and it doesn't have much rhythm to it. People are saying you whisper because you have no rhythm to your raps. If you had rhythm, then you'd have flow and you'd automatically sound much more comfortable with what your saying, making your delivery (tone of voice) more listenable. From there on you practice and master.

Good luck with it, but one things for sure, you are not Eminem. So don't even think about using Eminem concepts on your tracks, and the best way to do that is keep away from Eminem beats and think of you not Eminem. On this track, you used an Eminem beat along with an Eminem like concept, causing the listeners to think your jacking Eminems style, therefore original is what you need to be.


Care to elaborate on how it's a Eminem like concept? When i heard the instrumental i thought id give it a go, before even hearing the actual song (so i could avoid copying him at all).

Anyway thanks for your post and the advice.

So your telling me you didn't hear the song BEFORE you even knew about the beat? How/why would you look for a beat if you haven't even heard it yet? I think you're lying.
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Re: JBM - Music Box

Postby _Ironic_ » Dec 15th, '09, 06:47

JBM wrote:
Xray wrote:Your problem is you have no style. Your flow is nothing special and it doesn't have much rhythm to it. People are saying you whisper because you have no rhythm to your raps. If you had rhythm, then you'd have flow and you'd automatically sound much more comfortable with what your saying, making your delivery (tone of voice) more listenable. From there on you practice and master.

Good luck with it, but one things for sure, you are not Eminem. So don't even think about using Eminem concepts on your tracks, and the best way to do that is keep away from Eminem beats and think of you not Eminem. On this track, you used an Eminem beat along with an Eminem like concept, causing the listeners to think your jacking Eminems style, therefore original is what you need to be.


Care to elaborate on how it's a Eminem like concept? When i heard the instrumental i thought id give it a go, before even hearing the actual song (so i could avoid copying him at all).

Anyway thanks for your post and the advice.



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it's all eminem based concept rap.. and I just exampled only the first few bars in the song.

he's saying you need your OWN style, and not to copy ideas from eminem. like try not to use played topics that eminem has already touched on..cuz pretty much all of ur lines eminem has said in one way or another. :y: :y:
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Re: JBM - Music Box

Postby JBM » Dec 15th, '09, 07:03

That's stupid. I understand it though since this is a Eminem fan forum.

@xray What would i lie for bud? the instrumental was posted when i checked the forums. i listened to the instrumental and downloaded it. If i did hear music box before i recorded it I didn't remember the lyrics or flow.

This is probably my fault for using his beat so let me have it. Aha.
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Re: JBM - Music Box

Postby jba1me » Dec 16th, '09, 04:20

quality wasnt that good and it didnt have a lot of good rhymes but it was still alright ;)
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